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The RhyPiBoMo Golden Quill Poetry Contest is accepting entries! The guidelines are under the tab above. The deadline for submissions is April 26th at Midnight. As all of you are busy writing poems every day, you should have a hard time deciding which poem to submit! = ) There are three awesome prizes for this contest…

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First Place
Scholarship for The Craft and Pleasures of Writing Poetry for Kids
Donated by Mira Reisberg and Sudipta Bardhan Quallan

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Second Place
Scholarship for The Lyrical Language Lab: Punching up Prose with Poetry
Donated by Renee La Tulippe

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Third Place
Scholarship for a spot in Picture Book Magic Course
Donated by Susanna Leonard Hill

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You may only submit one poem for this contest. Please paste your poem in the body of your email and submit it by using the comment form for the contest entry. You must follow all the requirements for the contest or it will be disqualified. I must have your first and last name.  I have received several poems already and am looking forward to reading more.  Thanks to our esteemed judges Renee La Tulippe, Jill Esbaum, Tiffany Strelitz Haber!

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I was fortunate enough to meet today’s guest blogger at a SCBWI luncheon for Indiana authors last fall. I had just begun my search for RhyPiBoMo guest bloggers and she graciously agreed to join the list. She has access to the latest and greatest of children’s books and I’m honored that she is sharing an interview she did with Deborah Underwood, another RhyPiBoMo guest blogger, about her new book BAD BYE, GOOD BYE. It was completely coincidental that Deborah and Betsy were scheduled to blog the same week so we will get to hear more about this wonderful book and about Deborah’s creative process.

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Betsy Bird!

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What is the best possible time to rhyme in a picture book? Anytime at all? Only for specific reasons and specific moments? In my search to come up with the best possible interview for RhyPiBoMo I scanned through every possible picture book I knew of coming out in 2014. As a Youth Materials Specialist with NYPL, I get to see a lot of books early. After much head scratching and wonder, I finally hit on my favorite rhyming picture book of the year. Bad Bye, Good Bye, by Deobrah Underwood, illustrated by Jonathan Bean is the touching story of a boy coming to terms with a big move, almost in spite of himself. Told with spare words and gorgeous imagery, Underwood (best known for cranking out such contemporary classics as The Quiet Book) manages to tell a complete story with a gentle, simple rhyme. With a release date of April 1st, Ms. Underwood was kind enough to answer some of my questions about her proces

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Betsy Bird: First off, I absolutely adore Bad Bye, Good Bye. One of my favorite books of the year thus far. My question to you is what the impetus was to write it in the first place?

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Deborah Underwood: Oh, thank you so much! I don’t remember the precise moment the story idea formed. I think I was just playing around with words, as I often do, and I liked the sound of “bad bye.” The idea of a moving story evolved organically from that. I scribbled down eight words and a few other snippets, including the ending. Then I stuck it in my idea folder, where it languished for a long time. Often I sift through the folder in desperation when I have a critique group meeting coming up and nothing to bring, and I’m pretty sure that’s what happened here.

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Bad Bye NotesDeborah’s notes

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BB: Were you familiar with the work of illustrator Jonathan Bean before he was paired with this project or was it just an entirely lovely surprise?

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DU: He was new to me back then, but given that my genius editor Kate O’Sullivan chose him, I knew he’d be amazing. Of course I immediately looked him up and fell in love with his work, especially One Starry Night. And seeing his initial sketches for Bad Bye was another lovely surprise, because the style he used for this book was so different. He perfectly captures what it feels like to move: all those moments in time frozen and sometimes overlapping. The illustrations are just stunning. And I was profoundly impressed by his decision to go in this direction. Breaking away from what people might expect requires courage, and I love it when I see other creative people forging new territory; it really inspires me.

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BB: Rhyming picture books that aren’t awful are hard, to say the least. At their worst that sound like poor Dr. Seuss imitations. At their best they’re sublime. Your book falls into the latter category. Why did you want to make it rhyme at all?

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DU: It just started coming to me in rhyme. And truly, whenever a book starts coming to me in rhyme, there is a part of me that shrieks, “No no no no no no no!” and mentally reaches for an icepack and some Tylenol and a whole lot of chocolate and possibly whiskey. Because writing rhyme is so hard, and I know I’m in for weeks of pacing around my apartment muttering to myself and lunging for my Oxford Rhyming Dictionary.

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There is nothing like the misery of seeing a page with a few decent lines of rhyme at the top and the bottom and a whole lot of empty space in the middle where the rest of the story somehow has to materialize. But there’s also nothing like the satisfaction of having completed a rhyming manuscript that works. It’s like a combination of writing and doing a really difficult crossword puzzle.

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BB: Was there ever a temptation to make this a long and wordy book or was it always as incredibly simple as it stands right now?

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DU: Nope; the staccato rhythm and spare text was a fundamental part of the story to me. And I liked the challenge of telling a satisfying story in 80 words. When I started writing picture books in 2001, the conventional wisdom was that you needed to keep them under 1,000 words; times have changed!
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Deborah’s notes

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BB: Are you new to rhyming picture books or is this old hat for you?

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DU: I’ve written a number over the years, but this was the first one to sell. I’m happy to say that two others are under contract: Interstellar Cinderella (Chronicle, 2015) and Goodnight, Baddies (Beach Lane, 2016).

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BB: What was the editorial process like? Did you sit down with your editor and scrupulously consider and reconsider every sparse word, or is this pretty much what you handed in at the start?

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DU: Astonishingly, I think what was published is what I initially turned in! I did plenty of revising beforehand, of course. And there were several things that Kate and I revisited in the editing process. But after playing with alternatives and bouncing ideas back and forth, we went back to the original.

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I remember struggling because I liked the idea of “pancakes” as one of the lines. I loved the possibility of having a scene in a diner, because when I was a kid, eating breakfast out was so novel and great–I mean, pitchers of syrup! different flavors!! But having a two-syllable word would have broken the pattern of two one-syllable words per line, so we ultimately left it alone.

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BB: So, what are you working on next?

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DU: I’m working on the third Cat book–Here Comes Santa Cat! publishes this fall and is all wrapped up, but book three will be out next year. I’m flirting with the idea of getting back to my middle-grade novel. I’m doing work for a few educational publishers. And I need to dig through my idea folder and start something new!

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Bio:
Betsy Bird is currently New York Public Library’s Youth Materials Collections Specialist. She has served on Newbery, written for Horn Book, and has done other lovely little things that she’d love to tell you about but that she’s sure you’d find more interesting to hear of in person. Betsy is the creator of the School Library Journal blog A Fuse #8 Production. She is also the author of the (not rhyming) picture book Giant Dance Party and co-author with fellow bloggers Jules Danielson and Peter Sieruta of the upcoming Wild Things: Acts of Mischief in Children’s Literature, coming out with Candlewick in August 2014. Follow her on Twitter: @fuseeight.

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Youth Materials Specialist
New York Public Library
Branch Collection Department
31-11 Thomson Avenue
Long Island City, NY 11101
http://blog.schoollibraryjournal.com/afuse8production

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Check out Betsy’s debut picture book Giant Dance Party!

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Giant Dance Party by Betsy Bird (Spring 2013)

 

Thank you Betsy Bird!

 

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Thursday, April 10th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 12

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Consonance

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Consonance is often confused with assonance and alliteration. These three poetic devices are the building blocks of verse. The differences are slight but the effects are similar in their powerful ability to grab a reader.

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Consonance – is a poetic device where the repetition of a consonant sound; more specifically, the repetition of the final consonant sounds of accented syllables or important words. (write this down)

For Example:
First and Last
Odds and Ends
Short and Sweet
Stroke of Luck

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Consonance is one of the most common techniques used by writers. It adds a cadence to most sentences and can also be used to emphasize the importance of certain words in a poem.

For Example:
Pitter-patter,pitter-patter
In this line, the repetitive use of ‘p’, ‘tt’ and ‘r’ gives a unique rhythm to it, thereby enhancing its rhythmic appeal.

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One genre of contemporary poetry that has many examples of consonance is hip-hop music. In this example, there is a repetition of the sound ile, and ays.

For Example:
Zealots by Fugees
Rap rejects my tape deck, ejects projectile
Whether Jew or Gentile, I rank top percentile,
Many styles, More powerful than gamma rays
My grammar pays, like Carlos Santana plays
(This is also internal rhyme)

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Sometimes the initial and final consonant sounds are repeated.
For example:
Blade and Blood
Flash and Flesh
Wide and World
Lash and Leash

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This is an adorable poem by Kenn Nesbitt titled That Explains It! and it’s an awesome example of how consonance can really embellish a poem!

That Explains It!
I went to the doctor. He x-rayed my head.
He stared for a moment and here’s what he said.
“It looks like you’ve got a banana in there,
an apple, an orange, a peach, and a pear.
I also see something that looks like a shoe,
a plate of spaghetti, some fake doggy doo,
an airplane, an arrow, a barrel, a chair,
a salmon, a camera, some old underwear,
a penny, a pickle, a pencil, a pen,
a hairy canary, a hammer, a hen,
a whistle, a thistle, a missile, a duck,
an icicle, bicycle, tricycle, truck.
With all of the junk that you have in your head
it’s kind of amazing you got out of bed.
The good news, at least, is you shouldn’t feel pain.
From what I can see here you don’t have a brain.”
http://www.consonanceexamples.com/

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Assonance

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Assonance – (also called vowel rhyme) is the repetition of vowel sounds to create internal rhyme within a phrase or sentence. It is used to reinforce the meanings of words or to set the mood. (write this down)

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For Example:
Penitent and Reticence.
“on a proud round cloud in white high night”
The squeaky wheel gets the grease.
The early bird catches the worm.
“Hear the mellow wedding bells” by Edgar Allen Poe
“I lie down by the side of my bride”/”Fleet feet sweep by sleeping geese”/”Hear the lark and harden to the barking of the dark fox gone to ground” by Pink Floyd
“It’s hot and it’s monotonous.” by Sondheim

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Onomatopoeia

Onomatopoeia – is the formation of a word from a sound associated with what is named. It is the use of imitative and naturally suggestive words for rhetorical, dramatic, or poetic effect. Onomatopoeic words produce strong images that can both delight and amuse kids when listening to their parents read poetry. (write this down)

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For example:
Hiccup
Zoom
Bang
Beep
Moo
Splashbang
beep
burp
chirp
clash
crunch
drip
grunt
hiccup
hoot
knock
plop
quack
rattle
sizzle
stomp
thud
toot
varoom
whack
whir
zap
zoom

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Onomatopoeia used in poetry:

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“The burning wood hissed and crackled.”

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I chatter over stony ways,
In little sharps and trebles,
I bubble into eddying bays,
I babble on the pebbles. (from “The Brook” by Alfred, Lord Tennyson)

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“How they tinkle, tinkle, tinkle,
in the icy air of night!
How they clang, and clash, and roar!
What a horror they outpour. ” (from The Bells by Edgar Allan Poe)

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Onomatopoeia is also used in jokes:
Knock-knock ,Who’s there?
Boo
Boo who?
Don’t cry, I was only joking!

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Onomatopoeia used in Nursery Rhymes:
Baa Baa Black Sheep

Old McDonald had a Farm

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Onomatopoeia used in music for a dramatic effect:
Poetry by Langston Hughes – The Weary Blues

Mississippi John Hurt Richland Woman Blues

Resources:
http://examples-of-onomatopoeia.com/
http://examples.yourdictionary.com/5-examples-of-onomatopoeia.html

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Writing Prompt: Write a poem using all three poetic devices; Consonance, Assonance and Onomatopoeia.

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Wild, Wild Wednesday Where Repetition and Alliteration Win!

RhyPiBoMoers Mix and Mingle

over coffee and books!

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It seems that RhyPiBoMoers are starting to connect in person! I am so happy to share a photo of a group of lovely ladies who met at a local Barnes and Noble yesterday. These are online friends who came together face-to-face to chat about writing. All four of them are RhyPiBoMoers! They are all proudly holding a copy of Corey Rosen Schwartz’s Goldi Rocks and the Three Bears. Cori was one of our Golden Quill Guest Bloggers last week. I wish I were there to sip a chai latte and chat about Corey’s book with you! If any other RhyPiBoMoers meet, please send me a picture so I can post it here. May writing and rhyme continue to bring more writers together! Thanks for sharing this photo!

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Today’s guest blogger is an author I met many years ago at a SCBWI conference. I purchased several of her books then and they have graced my bookshelves for years as examples of wonderful rhyme! 

Piggies in a Polka

My favorite of her books is titled PIGGIES IN A POLKA and is delightfully full of “Piggy” descriptions.

My favorite verse is…

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“The fiddle player saws a note.

He sets their boots a-scootin’.

Fiddle-dee-dee and yessiree,

those pigs are rootin’ tootin’.

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That playful, dancing, clever rhyme is what I aspire to write in a rhyming picture book myself!

She is generous with her time and I am so proud to have her with us today!

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Kathi Appelt

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                                                                    Kathi and her cat Mingus

                                                                     Photographer Igor Kraguljak
                                                                                            

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Greetings Rhymsters!

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Have you ever heard of a phenomenon called the Keats heuristic? It has to do with aphorisms and the way we perceive them based upon their forms. A scholar named Matthew McGlone, now at the University of Texas spent several years looking into it. What he found was that if something was stated in rhyme, the people he quizzed were more likely to believe it. Rhyme, it seems, added merit.

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Examples would be such old chestnuts as “haste makes waste,” “red skies in morning, sailors take warning,” or “an apple a day keeps the doctor away.” Is there any definitive truth to those? There may be small kernels, but I think it’s safe to say that to rely upon any of them might be at least a little foolish. They may be “truthy” in other words, but you couldn’t actually prove them.

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Nevertheless, it turns out that there is something innately reassuring about rhyme, something that lets us feel as if we’ve got a bead on what we need. You could say that a rhyme in time makes you feel fine.

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Rhyming picture books certainly aren’t all true in the literal sense of the word. But I think that even the most rambunctious and rowdy of them, even those that are filled with nonsense words, speak to that same human yearning for comfort that we find in familiar aphorisms.
Our brains are wired for rhyme. Rhyming helps us remember, it helps us learn, and so too it seems, it reassures us.

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I remember years ago, when I was working on a book called Bubbles, Bubbles. One morning, I woke up early, and in the rosy light that streamed through my bedroom window, the word “bubbles” seemed to hover there just above my blankets. Before I even got out of bed, I started thinking about words that rhymed with it—tubbles, scrubbles, chubbles—none of those words even existed, but they made me smile.
The very next thought that came to me was one of overwhelming gratitude. “How great is this?” I thought. “Here I get to wake up with funny rhymes in my head, and I get paid for it too.” And in that moment, I felt like the luckiest person alive. The soft light, the bubbly, scrubbly, chubbly wonder of it all, reminded me that life hardly got better.

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And I believe this is what happens when we read rhyme to someone we love, whether it’s to a baby, a toddler, a teenager, our sweetheart, our friends, our grandparents. Regardless of whether we’re sharing a rhyme with someone brand new or someone who is passing on, there is an undercurrent of trust and comfort in those sing-songy lines that brings us together.
People say that rhyme is hard, and I won’t deny that. But I also know that it’s important in a fundamentally human way. It’s why I can’t give it up. It’s why I love it. It’s why I eat an apple almost every day.

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Kathi Appelt,

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Bio:
Kathi Appelt is the award-winning author of many children’s books, including Bat Jamboree, illustrated by Melissa Sweet, and Incredible Me!, illustrated by G. Brian Karas. Ms. Appelt teaches creative writing to both children and adults and lives in College Station, Texas.
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http://www.kathiappelt.com

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Thank you Kathi Appelt!

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Wednesday, April 9th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 11

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Alliteration

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Alliteration is when a series of words in a row (or close to a row) have the same first consonant sound. (write this down)

Beginning Alliteration – is when the repeating words have the same first consonant at the beginning of the word. (write this down)
For example:
She sells seashells by the sea shore.

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Hidden/Internal Alliteration – is when the repeating consonants are hidden within words. (write this down)
For example:
Great are her woes. The r sound is repeated.
Wiggle, Piggle, Giggle The g sound is repeated.

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Why do we use Alliteration?

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Alliteration is something we hear with our ears more than what we see with our eyes. It is about listening for the similar sounds. Often, alliteration is used in a humorous way, but not always. The repeating sounds catch our ear. They stand out and bring attention to the language in that particular line. Any technique that helps a reader focus on the language or words chosen is a positive step in the right direction for that poem.

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Here are some examples of alliteration used in daily life:
Popular businesses with alliteration in their names to assure customers remember it:
Dunkin’ Donuts
PayPal
Best Buy
Coca-Cola
LifeLock
Park Place
American Apparel
American Airlines
Chuckee Cheese’s
Bed Bath & Beyond
Krispy Kreme
The Scotch and Sirloin

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Famous people with alliteration in their names:
Many of these are stage names that were chosen with alliteration in mind.
Ronald Reagan
Sammy Sosa
Jesse Jackson
Michael Moore
William Wordsworth
Mickey Mouse
Porky Pig
Lois Lane
Marilyn Monroe
Fred Flintstone
Donald Duck
Spongebob Squarepants
Seattle Seahawks
Katie Courec (Remember, alliterative words don’t even necessarily have to start with the same letter, they simply have to have the same first sound).

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Common phrases that have alliteration:
Busy as a bee
Dead as a doornail
Get your goat
Good as gold
Home sweet home
Last laugh
Make a mountain out of a molehill
Method to the madness
Neck and neck
Out of order

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Repetition

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Repetition is when a word or phrase is used several times within a line or stanza. Often a word that is repeated is the key to the message of the poem. It is exaggerated on purpose. A word is repeated to help us remember it. Repetition was often used in ballads where no one wrote it down so they used repetition to help others remember the song. (write this down)
For example:
In songs, lines that are repeated are called refrains. This is a common technique used in music.

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Anaphora is the repetition of a word or phrase at the beginning of every clause. (write this down)

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Diaphora is the repetition of a name, first to signify the person or persons it describes, then to signify its meaning. (write this down)

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Polyptoton is where the author repeats words derived from the same root but with different endings. (write this down)

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As we are learning how alliteration and repetition are useful, especially in orally read text, it is important it is to listen how powerful the language and word choices can be in our writing, I’ve added a few famous, powerful speeches with brilliant speakers and even more brilliant speech writers! Listen for the various forms of repetition and alliteration in their well-chosen words. They are very good at sneaking these techniques in…

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Martin Luther King – I Have a Dream Speech on August 28, 1963

(this is long but well worth the listen)

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Ronald Reagan – A Time for Choosing Speech

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President John F. Kennedy – Apollo Speech

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2_JlSdRCg7g&index=14&list=PL4A1446D924B9C895

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Why do we use repetition?

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1) Repetition is useful to provide sound patterns when there is no end word rhyme.
2) Repetition gives emphasis to the main focus of your poem.
3) Repetition can bring joy to the oral reading of a poem when done well.
4) Repetition is used to provide clarity, amplification, or emotional effect

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Several suggestions of how to use repetition:
Use a repeated line at the beginning and the end of a poem.
Use a repeated line as the first line of each stanza.
Use a repetitive phrase 2 or 3 times within one poem.

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Writing Prompt: Choose one of the three methods above and use repetition in a poem.

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Rhythmic Tuesday

 I’m pleased to see that some of you are beginning to share you poetry on my website! I have really enjoyed reading the poems and look forward to seeing what you will share in the future!

 If you are interested in sharing your poetry here, click the Pearls of Poetry tab above and share away!

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Are you a member of SCBWI?

SCBWI is an organization that is essential for you to belong to as a children’s writer. It stands for the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators.  Here is the link to the website: http://www.scbwi.org/

You will find everything you need to know about writing and illustrating for children here. There are local and national conferences, awards, grants, a resource, library, a place to sell your books, and much much more. Please check it out if you are not a member. There is an annual fee of $90.00 and it will be the best investment in your future that you will ever make.  I’m told many editors view your membership in SCBWI as the sign of a professional writer so make sure to add that into a cover letter when you submit a manuscript.

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When I began this journey to create RhyPiBoMo back in November of 2013, I started asking other writers who they suggested I ask to guest blog…Shutta Crum’s name kept coming back to me as quickly as I would ask the question!  She has been a delight to meet and I am thrilled that she is here to share her insight into scansion, meter and rhythm!

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Shutta Crum

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Tuning Your Ear to the Sound of Poetry

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Studies confirm that we hear sounds before we are born—our mother’s heartbeats, intestinal sounds, music, and the rise and fall of spoken language. Further, researchers have found that fetuses who are spoken to in a variety of pitches have an increased interest in sounds, and the inflections in sound, after birth. This is reflected in their heartbeats and brain activity.

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To really savor a poem, I believe we need to hear it read aloud. Oh yes, the letters on the page and the physical body of a poem is important, too. It’s good to be able to see that, and even to trace our fingers over the printed page—touching the text and the spaces around it. But to really take a poem into ourselves the music of its language must be taken in through the ears. (If only we could eat them, and smell them, too!)

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One way writers catch clunkiness in poems, or prose, is to hear their work read aloud, either by the writer, or others. The ear is more precise in rooting out awkward phrases, discordant sounds, and clumsy rhythms than the eye. Some authors record themselves reading their work and then play that back, noting places where the work could be smoother.

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Some writers, like myself, also must strive to overcome regional dialects. My family is from the Appalachian region of Kentucky and West Virginia. Sometimes I hear words differently than others do. I’m aware of this, and will often have another read my work aloud for me. (Spouses are good for this!) And occasionally, I will listen to the pronunciations of some words using an online audio dictionary. This is just to make sure I’ve put the stresses in the right places—especially if I am working on a metrical piece.

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One of the most inspiring and helpful activities a poet can partake in is to attend poetry readings. Listen to others, their cadences, pitch, word choices, and yes . . . accents. Let yourself drift away on the melodies of the spoken word. Sure, you may not like the voices of some readers. And you may not agree with the message, or perspective, of some poems. But don’t worry about that too much. You’re there to listen to the rise and fall of our quirky language—the quick prick of impish “i” sounds, and lull of “u,” and those good, deep double “oo” sounds, too. And there’re all those soothing, or explosive, consonants, as well.

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These are the tools of our trade. We need to hear them in use—not just read them—before we can master our tools. And if you’re brave enough, go to a reading on an open mic night and let others hear you read. You may also come away with some valuable feedback. Finally, if you hear a poem and it just “feels right,” try to get a copy. Read it aloud, over and over. Try to figure out why it works for you. As a writer it isn’t enough to just know it works; you want to know why/how it works and how you can do that, too. Sometimes we simply love something because it is familiar—and that’s fine. A poem you love may use a measure that has become a cultural standard such as the ballad measure, or common measure. (Alternating four beat and three beat iambic lines rhyming aBaB, or aBcB, such as in America the Beautiful, Emily Dickinson’s poems, or hymns like Amazing Grace.)

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If a poem you love is in a standard metrical pattern such as those listed above, ask yourself: How can I work with this, change it, and still love it? And let me say that I believe all poems are lyrical—though some are a bit less so than others. This is due to a poem’s condensed nature. Generally, a poem has a great deal to accomplish in a small amount of time and space. (Note, there are always exceptions. Epic poetry can fill volumes!) There are insights, sensual details, probing questions, humor, pathos and epiphanies magically conjured. Lyricism facilitates all that, and more. With the right sounds we are lulled into a place where our defenses are down and we, as listeners and lovers of poetry, say “Here! I’ve opened my heart. Now, come in!”

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Isn’t that the point of it all?

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Bio: Shutta Crum is the author of numerous picture books and two novels. Most of her books have made “best book” and state reading lists around the country. THUNDER-BOOMER! was named an SLJ, ALA and Smithsonian Mag. “Notable Book” of the year. Of Shutta’s book MINE! the NY Times says: “. . . a delightful example of the drama and emotion that a nearly wordless book can convey.” DOZENS OF COUSINS, illustrated by the award-wining David Catrow, is her latest book. In 2005, Shutta was asked to read at the White House. In 2010 she was invited to tour American military base schools across Japan. For more: http://www.shutta.com .

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Here are a few of Shutta’s books that you will want to read!

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 Dozens of Cousins. Clarion, 2013.

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 Shutta Crum 2

 Thunder Boomer! Clarion Books 2009

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Shutta Crum 3

Mine! Alfred A. Knopf, 2011.

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Tuesday, April 8th

By Angie Karcher © 2014 Lesson 10

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Scansion, Meter vs. Rhythm

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Scansion is: when a writer uses a system of marking accented and unaccented syllables to analyze the meter in the poem.

Accented syllables are pronounced slightly louder and with more emphasis than unaccented syllables.

Poetry is arranged in lines and in patterns of accented and unaccented syllables called metrical feet.

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Once you can recognize and mark the accented/unaccented syllables in a line, you will become better at expressing the rhythmic flow you desire.

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Here is a great article on how to practice scansion:

http://www.ehow.com/how_10066149_mark-accented-syllables-poetry.html

Typically unstressed lines are marked with an upward curved symbol that looks like a smile.  It looks like this  ˘

There are many, many symbols that can describe the stress and unstressed parts of words depending on the teachings of various linguists.

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When researching scansion, meter and rhythm, I found this page online that perfectly and simply describes everything we need to know about rhythm, meter and scansion…as I am having a terrible time getting the website to accept all the symbols involved with scansion and the spacing is a complete nightmare, I am sharing this information from a teacher’s webpage he posted for his class. I take no credit in this information at all. It is fully Mr. Black’s words and research. I am simply sharing it for the sake of education and because it is so well said in it’s simplicity and content!  Plus, there is no need to reinvent the wheel here! I will not be this fortunate to find such a great lesson over our other topics…LOL

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Please refer to this link for today’s lesson:

The link: http://server.riverdale.k12.or.us/~bblack/meter.html

 

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Just so you know, Mr. Black is a 5th grade English teacher Are you smarter than a 5th grader?

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Writing Exercise: Try to scan these poem excerpts below?

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The morns are meeker than they were,

The nuts are getting brown;

The berry’s cheek is plumper,

The rose is out of town. –Emily Dickinson

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Bats have webby wings that fold up;

Bats from ceilings hang down rolled up;

Bats when flying undismayed are;

Bats are careful; bats use radar; –Frank Jacobs, “The Bat”

 

Resources:

http://www.ehow.com/how_10066149_mark-accented-syllables-poetry.html

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Mr. Black, You are my Hero!

I’ve tried to come up with something to add to his information but without sounding redundant, that’s it in a nut shell! I feel odd not having typed all that out tonight, searching for better examples and then sharing them but it would have taken hours and then once transferred to my blog would have taken more hours to get the spacing right…so I am letting this one be. When it’s good, it’s good! This gives me more time to work on the next lesson. Ok…Guilt trip over! LOL

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Okay, now do everything else on the pledge for today and don’t forget to comment on today’s blog post!

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It’s Monday, Rhyming Fun Day!

It’s Monday, Rhyming Fun Day!

Here we are…ready for the second week! I know last week was a lot of information but now you have it to look back on. I am already much more comfortable with the many terms that we covered last week. Do I remember everything? Nope, but when I am researching for the lessons and come across some of the terminology, it is becoming more familiar. It takes time to learn new concepts. 

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Thank you for all the kind and complementary comments! It is what keeps me going as my butt has been in this chair for many hours over the past few weeks. It is exactly what I needed to get myself focused. Jane Yolen would be proud of us all! She was pleased with the number of you who signed up to receive her daily poems. If you are interested, send her an email at Janeyolen@aol.com and mention that you will promise to either buy one of her books or borrow one from the library each month. Please also mention that you are participating in RhyPiBoMo as Jane is our guest blogger this Saturday. I think it is too late to receive poems for this month as she only admits people at the beginning of each month. Tell Jane I said “Hi!”

 

Rhyming Party

We had our 2nd Rhyming Party today on the RhyPiBoMo Facebook Group page…It was rhyming hilarity at it’s best! During the party, we played a few rhyming games and I ask trivia type questions about the blog and things that have been mentioned here. Everyone playing is obligated to comment with their answers in rhyme. It’s fun to see them rushing to answer and keep their brains in rhyming form. Here are a few of my favorite quotes from the party…

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Laura Rackham This was in reference to a question asking what my husband’s name is… (Stan) ”A man so fine to inspire such rhyme” LOL

Lori Mozdzierz “Verse sense makes us less dense!”

Lori Mozdzierz “Laughing out loud! We are a smart crowd!”

Pamela Courtney “They’re both winners of….two plate chicken dinners. From Popeyes (how ’bout that?)”

Pamela Courtney “To the seasoned and beginners, we’re all true winners. Righteous! Brighteous! and Outta Sighteous!”

Helen Kemp Zax “What a wonderful time, spent wholly in rhyme!”

Suzy Leopold “See you soon raccoons!”

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I hope you can join us for the next rhyming party. Request to join the Facebook Group and make sure you are registered for the event to participate. If you are not sure if you are registered, there is a tab above that says RhyPiBoMo Registration List…Check and see if your name is on it. If not, Click the tab to Register asap! Registration ends April 16th  You must be registered to win any prizes. There were several people who would have won a prize for last week but they were not registered for the event.

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Pearls of Poetry

Pearls of Poetry 1

https://angiekarcher.wordpress.com/pearls-of-poetry-wisdom/

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Several people have asked if there is a place they can share their poetry with the group.  There is! Look at the tab above that says Pearls of Poetry…That is a place for any writer to share kid-friendly poetry. It is completely optional and not part of this challenge. I wanted to wait a week before I mentioned it so you don’t feel obligated. It is a place for sharing and perusing at your leisure. I will try to stop by to read the poetry there as I can but please feel free to share any poetry that is again, kid and family friendly.

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Pearls of Poetry 2

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We are fortunate to have today’s guest blogger as she is a busy editor at Putnam. I’m thrilled to have her here to help us understand the editor’s point of view when it comes to rhyming picture books and poetry.  

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Susan Kochan

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       Rhypibomo Guest Blogger Badge       Susan Kochan 1

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With Susan’s busy schedule we decided it best to do a Question and Answer session. I have thought of a dozen other questions for her now that the event is here but thankfully, she was happy to answer the questions I came up with back in January…

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What did you want to be when you grew up?

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–I went through a phase of wanting to be an architect, fully inspired by Lincoln Logs and Legos, but quickly got over that when I learned how much math and physics was involved. I was a huge bookworm as well but never knew or thought about working with books as an option for a career.

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Please tell us about your professional journey through children’s books…

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–I was an elementary education major in college and loved my children’s literature classes best. Whole Language was popular while I was in school and using trade books in all subjects seemed natural and fun to me. After four years of teaching, I realized that was not the profession for me but didn’t know what I could do next. I had spent one year as a substitute teacher and while my students were at specials, I’d scour the library for new books (no planning for subs – yay!). That felt a lot like my time in my elementary school library and led me to wonder if there were something I could do with books. I knew authors and illustrators from using trade books in all of my classrooms, but I didn’t know anything about publishing at all. I was lucky enough to get an interview with Margaret Frith at Putnam and landed in editorial. In the beginning I was equally amazed by being surrounded by books and the wonderful people who created them and the fact that I could go to the restroom whenever I wanted. I’m in my twentieth year at Putnam (!) and sometimes still can’t believe I get to help make books for a living.

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Why did you decide to be an editor?

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–I would have taken any job in publishing and honestly didn’t know much about any of the departments. My breadth of knowledge about recent books, authors, and illustrators made me a good fit for editorial and then I was able to find some great manuscripts in the slush pile so they kept me around.

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How do you feel about rhyming books in today’s market?

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What should authors always do when submitting rhyme and poetry?

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–Find many people who will read your work aloud in front of you before you think it’s ready to submit. You can learn a lot about trouble spots by listening to fresh readers. Mark every word they trip on.

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What should authors never do when submitting rhyme and poetry?

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–Don’t force rhymes.

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— awkward phrasing to make lines end with the rhyming word

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–one or two difficult or sophisticated words in the mix purely for the rhyme

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–Don’t mix stanzas with different meters or styles of poems within one story (for example – some stanzas have three lines while others have two; one stanza ends with words that all rhyme while the next has rhyming words for every other line)

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–Don’t think you can get away with lazy rhymes or uneven rhythm because you see it in other books.
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On a scale of 1-10 how much bad rhyme do you get?

1= not much…to…10 = I’m out of rejection letters!

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Describe the excitement when you read brilliant rhyme.

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–It makes me smile and laugh out loud or stop and reread a few times. It makes me marvel at how much fun language can be. I instantly think about how a child will respond.

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What do you predict the future is for rhyme and poetry?

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Bio:

Susan Kochan has been with Putnam for almost twenty years after a short-lived career as an elementary teacher. She acquires fiction and nonfiction from young picture books through middle-grade novels. She is the editor of many rhyming picture books including Falling for Rapunzel and Waking Beauty by Leah Wilcox, illustrated by Lydia Monks; Hornbooks and Inkwells and Civil War Drummer Boy by Verla Kay, illustrated by S. D. Schindler and Larry Day (respectively); Oh No, Gotta Go by Susan Middleton Elya, illustrated by G. Brian Karas; Cool Daddy Rat by Kristyn Crow, illustrated by Mike Lester; The Three Ninja Pigs and Ninja Red Riding Hood by Corey Rosen Schwartz, illustrated by Dan Santat; and The Gingerbread Man Loose in the School and The Gingerbread Man Loose on the Fire Truck by Laura Murray, illustrated by Mike Lowery.

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Here are Putnam’s guidelines (the short version):
Putnam Children’s accepts unsolicited manuscripts, but we can’t respond to the huge volume we receive. Please send just manuscripts (no SASE) to: Putnam Children’s Editorial, 345 Hudson Street, NY, NY 10014 and we will respond within four months if we are interested.

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Thank you Susan Kochan!

 

 

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Monday, April 7th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 9

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Reasons to Rhyme…

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Definition of Rhyme:
– identity in sound of some part, especially the end, of words or lines of verse. http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/rhyme

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– correspondence in the sounds of two or more lines (especially final sounds), to be similar in sound, especially with respect to the last syllable
http://rhymezone.com/r/rhyme.cgi?Word=rhyme&typeofrhyme=def&org1=syl&org2=l&org3=y

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– a repetition of similar sounds in two or more words, most often at the end of lines in poems and songs. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rhyme

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Rhyme is a technique of writing that works best when it is not obvious! As a writer, I want someone to read my poem and think about my word choices for their meanings and not my rhyme scheme. (write this down)

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First I think we have to distinguish the difference between good rhyme and bad rhyme. Good rhyme occurs when the two or more words that rhyme complement each other in respect to meaning, sound and/or thought. In other words, the rhyming words add to the joy of reading that particular text.

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Bad rhyme occurs when the writer is using language as a scapegoat. The rhyming words are chosen almost exclusively because of the ending sounds involved…not taking into consideration the meanings of the words. Bad rhyme does NOT add to the joy of reading the text. It confuses the reader and often makes the text silly or nonsensical. Bad rhyme keeps the writer from saying what he/she truly wants to say.

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From here on out I will be making reference to rhyme…aka: Good rhyme.

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Why do we write in rhyme? (write this down or add to your list from last week)

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Let’s first think about why rhyme is a positive influence …

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  1) Rhyme is an echo that gives a feeling of closure. You call out, then you get an answer.

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2) Rhyme helps the reader remember the poem or the rhyming picture book text.

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3) Rhyme gives a logical order to our thoughts when reading.

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4) Rhyme is pleasant to read silently and extremely satisfying to hear or read orally.

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5) Rhyme is an awesome tool to help new readers understand language and to become confident readers.

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6) Rhyme enables the new reader to use context clues in the sentence to make an educated guess as to the ending word, or rhyme word.

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7) Rhyme brings joy to reading. It encourages the listener and reader to be playful, find fun in language and makes reading a positive experience.

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Rhyming word collage

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End Rhyme/ Perfect Rhyme/Complete Rhyme/Full Rhyme/True Rhyme/Exact Rhyme…Lots of names for the same thing! (write this down)

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Definition – end rhyme, in poetry, a rhyme that occurs in the last syllables of a line or verse. Words with ending rhyme have the same final vowel sound and following consonant sound(s).

End rhymes in one syllable words:

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For example: The word cat rhymes with words with the short a/ consonant T sound –at sound (rhymes with flat, mat, brat, hat)
The word great rhymes with the words with the long a/ consonant T sound –ate sound (rhymes with plate, eight, straight, bait)

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End rhymes in multiple syllable words: (write this down)

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The beginning syllables of these words are disregarded.

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Words with last syllable rhyme have the same sounds following the last syllable, usually with a consonant, a vowel, and another consonant (CVC pattern).

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The word un-told rhymes with words with a consonant/the long o/ consonant D sound -old sound (rhymes with fold, *rolled, marigold, buttonholed)

The word swea-ter rhymes with words with the consonant sound/short e/ consonant r -er sound (rhymes with doctor, waiter, sister, water, were)

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The word ab-stain with the last syllable having a consonant sound/long a/consonant sound -ain sound (rhymes with restrain, champagne, grain, brain)

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Masculine Rhyme
Definition – Rhymes with a stressed final syllable – 2 syllables (write this down)
For example: re-flect/ob-ject/re-ject/pro-tect

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Femenine Rhyme
Definition – Rhyme with an unstressed final syllable – 2 syllables (write this down)
For example: scram-ble/ ram-ble/ gam-ble/sham-ble

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Double Rhymes
Definition – 2 syllable words that have the same vowel sound in the second-to-last syllable and all following sounds. (write this down)

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For example: The word boring rhymes with words that end in –oring. So, to be a double rhyme here, these words must have a vowel O/consonant R/ and an –ing ending. (adoring, pouring, restoring, scoring)

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Other examples of double rhyme include:
talking/walking
swimming/brimming
conviction/prediction

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Beginning Rhymes/First Syllable Rhyme/Reverse Rhyme
Definition – Words with beginning rhyme have the same initial consonant sound(s) and the same first vowel sound. (write this down)

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This option lets you find words with initial alliteration (the repetition of initial consonant sounds), initial assonance (the repetition of initial vowel sounds), and front rhyme (the succession of beginning sounds of words).(write this down)

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For example:
cat/kangaroo/candy
reminder/relieve/redo
phrase/frame/frail

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Consonant Alliteration at the beginning of words: The repetition of consonant sounds at the beginning of words; alliteration, as in The fair breeze blew, the white foam flew. Also called head rhyme, initial rhyme. (write this down)

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Forced Rhyme
Definition – A rhyme that is produced by changing the normal spelling of a word, or by changing the normal structure of a phrase. (write this down)

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In my research it was clear that forced rhyme is a clear sign of an amateur writer. Forced rhyme is viewed as unprofessional, where the writer has convoluted the entire structure of the poem to make the rhyme fit. It is looked at as desperate or lazy by editors. Forced rhyme is considered one of the main reasons rhyming manuscripts are rejected by editors. It is suggested that reading good formal poetry, sending a manuscript to a critique group and utilizing a rhyming dictionary are all good solutions to forced rhyme. You can be sure that forced rhyme is definitely a rhyming crime! Don’t do it!

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Inversion/Inverted Rhyme
Definition – Awkward rhyme where a word is purposely switched from its natural position in order to make a rhyme pattern fit; changing the normal word order of a sentence. (write this down)

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For example: the last line is inverted
On a cool fall day
In the elm tree’s shade
I passed the time away
For you, I stayed. The natural flow of this line would be I stayed for you.

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As author/poet Mary Oliver states in her book, A POETRY HANDBOOK “Good inversion is wonderful. Good inversion is difficult to achieve. Bad inversion is never wonderful and rarely difficult to achieve.”

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Slant Rhymes/Half Rhymes/Off Rhyme
Definition – Words with sounds that are closely related but not identical. (write this down)

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For example:
lace/less
seer/share
hear/ware
blonde/stand
here/chair

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Internal Rhyme
Definition: a rhyme created by two or more words in the same line of verse. This is actually a common rhyme form, typically used in nursery rhymes. (write this down)

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For example:
Jack Spratt could eat no fat
The cat sat on the mat
Old Mother Hubbard went to the cupboard
Simple Simon met a pieman
The crazy moose is loose in the caboose
I am the daughter of Earth and water

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One big problem with rhyme is that different people pronounce the same word differently, based upon where they live.

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Dialect – The way a language is spoken in a particular place or among a particular group of people.
There is plenty of room for discussion on this subject but not today as this lesson was much more involved than I thought it would be. You need to be aware of the words you choose and how they may be pronounced in other parts of the country or world.

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Dialect map
For example, in the United States, there are more than a dozen different dialects of the English language spoken.

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Resources:
http://www.rhymer.com/
A Poetry Community – I came across this online group…I don’t belong but it looks like it might be worthwhile.
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/register.html
A POETRY HANDBOOK
http://www.amazon.com/A-Poetry-Handbook-Mary-Oliver/dp/0156724006

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Writing Prompt: Make lists of rhyming words for each category above.

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Okay, now do everything else on the pledge for today and don’t forget to comment on today’s blog post!
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No Rest for the RhyPiBoMoers!

It’s Sunday, the day for our

Rhyming Party today at Noon, Central Time!

Go to the

RhyPiBoMo Facebook Group

to join the fun!

RhyPiBoMo Rhyming Party

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Announcing this weeks daily prize winners!

Don’t forget to comment EACH  day that you participate in order to be eligible for the week’s prizes. You have until Midnight on Saturday each week to get caught up for the week.  There were several people who would have won a prize that commented but are not registered for the event. You must be registered to qualify for a prize! Click the registration tab above or go to https://angiekarcher.wordpress.com/rhypibomo-registration/and register now!

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This week’s Daily Prize winners are:                              

Sunday              Kevan Atteberry Art quality signed print of his rhyme cartoon       Penny Parker Klostermann

Monday             Bear Feels Scared by Karma Wilson                                                            Charlotte Dixon

Tuesday            Who Goes There? by Karma Wilson                                                              Cecilia Clark

Wednesday       Choice of Noodle & Lou, Think Big or Happy Birthday

                            Bunny by Liz Garton Scanlon                                                                         Lori Mozdzierz

Thursday          Beetle Bop  by Denise Fleming                                                                        Helen Dening

Friday                2 Hour Manuscript Edit by Jackie Hosking                                               Jennifer B. Young

Saturday           underGROUND BY Denise Fleming                                                              Jill Proctor

 

WINNERS: EMAIL me at 

Angie.karcher@yahoo.com

with your mailing addresses to receive your prize!

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As our Daily Lesson is on stanzas today, I thought I’d share a Stanza Riddle!

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Who is tall, dark and handsome and puts up with a children’s author who…

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Writes all night and sleeps all day,

forgets to make dinner but write this buffet?

He doesn’t complain or ever ask why,

my husband Stan-za really great guy!

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Mardi Gras 2013

Mardi Gras 2013

Thank you Stan Karcher for putting up with my shenanigans! I love you!

Happy Birthday on April 23rd! I’m telling you early in case I forget in all my RhyPiBoMo mania! = )

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Fortunately, you can’t see how messy my office has become in one short week, strewn with picture books, rhyming dictionaries, and empty coffee mugs, but look what came in the mail Yesterday! I finally got my copy of GOOD BYE, BAD BYE. It is a delight! This newly released rhyming picture book is a gem, combining Deborah’s thrifty yet brilliant text and Jonathan Bean’s amazing illustrations.

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“Bad truck, bad guy; bad wave, bad bye . . .” A boy and his family are packing up their old home, and the morning feels scary and sad. But when he arrives at his new home, an evening of good byes awaits: bye to new friends, bye to glowing fireflies, bye to climbing trees. Happy Book Birthday month to BAD BYE, GOOD BYE!

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Deborah Underwood

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How’s Your Verse Sense?

You may know people whose poetic efforts are impeccable. Their rhymes are natural, not forced; they don’t use convoluted syntax (like “the box unopened underneath her bed she put”); their words skip along, effortlessly conforming to the metrical structure they’ve set up.

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You may also know otherwise-excellent writers who repeatedly bring subpar rhyming manuscripts to critique meetings. The rhymes are forced. Some lines are missing a foot (or two or three). The metrical pattern changes randomly from stanza to stanza.

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What do the former folks have that the latter folks lack? I call it verse sense: the ability to tell good verse from bad.

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Like any writing skill or asset, verse sense comes naturally to some. I feel fortunate in that it’s pretty easy for me to hear when rhyme doesn’t work. Writing descriptive passages, though? I am terrible at that. Terrible!

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Does this mean that if I yearn to write a description-filled novel, I shouldn’t try it? Of course not. But I’ll have an extra hurdle, because my natural description ability is nonexistent. I’ll need to work my tail off to compensate.

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You can probably see where I’m going with this.

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You’ve heard a million times how biased editors are against rhyming manuscripts. That’s because they’ve seen so many bad ones. And does any writer think she’s submitting a bad rhyming manuscript? Of course not!

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Thus, the bad manuscripts are submitted by people who 1) don’t have natural verse sense and 2) don’t know that they lack it.

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That last bit is important. Because if you know you don’t have verse sense, you can acquire it through study and practice. You can:

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– Learn about poetic forms in more detail. (Participating in RhyPiBoMo is a great place to start!)
– Analyze your rhyme beat by beat, marking stressed and unstressed syllables and counting feet in each line.
– Rely on writing friends who do have an ear for rhyme.
– Comb through your work to eliminate syntactical contortions.
– Read all the fabulous rhyming picture books you can get your hands on. (Read some bad ones too and figure out why they don’t work!)
– Surround yourself with good rhyme of all kinds. One of my favorite non-kidlit sources: the works of Gilbert & Sullivan. I was a huge fan of The Mikado when I was in grade school, and I attribute some of my rhyme affinity to my early fascination with and delight in that operetta’s clever libretto.

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Basically, you must do whatever you need to do to make your rhyming manuscripts very, very good. Because that is what they need to be–for your own sake, so you can get them published, and for the sake of the kids who will read them.

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So where are you on the verse sense spectrum? Are you certain you’re rhyme-savvy, because many friends you trust have told you that? Are you so-so? Do you suspect that you don’t have a natural affinity for rhyme?

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An honest assessment, with the help of trusted critique pals, will help you plan your next steps. Then onward to rhyming glory!

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Two of Deborah’s Latest books:

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Deborah is the author of the following children’s books:
The Loud Book (Houghton Mifflin, 2011)
The Quiet Book (Houghton Mifflin, 2010)
A Balloon for Isabel (Greenwillow Books, 2010)
Granny Gomez & Jigsaw (Disney*Hyperion, 2010)
Pirate Mom (Random House, 2006)

She writes the Sugar Plum Ballerina chapter book series with Whoopi Goldberg.

She’ s written numerous nonfiction books for educational publishers. Her poems, articles, and stories have been published in National Geographic Kids, Spider, Ladybug, Pockets, and other children’s magazines. She has also been hired by educational publishers to write leveled science books, phonics readers, testing passages, and test questions.

Thank You Deborah Underwood!

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Sunday, April 6th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 8

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Stanza

A Stanza is a rhyming pattern in poetry that forms a group. (write this down)
A stanza can have any number of lines. These groups of lines are given specific names.
Usually there is a blank line between stanzas to separate them.
The different verses in music are stanzas.

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I listed these yesterday but we will go into more detail now…

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Special names of stanzas depending on the number of lines:

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2 lines – Couplet
3 lines – Tercet
4 lines – Quatrain
5 lines – Quintet
6 lines – Sestet
7 lines – Septet
8 lines – Octave
9 lines – Nine-line stanza
10 line – Ten-line stanza etc…

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Couplets, tercets and quatrains are the foundation of poetry! (write this down)

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Couplet – A 2 line stanza with end words that rhyme.
For example:
I want to climb the tree so high
And reach to touch the cloudy sky

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Tercet – A 3 line stanza with end words that rhyme.
For example:
When walking down the gravel road
I spied a slimy, greenish toad.
He jumped into in his wet abode.

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Quatrain – A 4 line stanza with a variety of rhyme schemes.
The most common rhyme scheme for a quatrain is where lines 2 and 4 rhyme.

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For example:
I see while sitting in the grass
and counting sheep by twos.
Two, four, six, yes eight of them
are really full-grown ewes.

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How could I get through this post without mentioning

Jill Esbaum’s adorable rhyming picture book titled

STANZA…

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Stanza is a closet poet who secretly enters a poetry contest. He’s hoping to win first prize, fame, fortune and Lotsa snapper treats.

*My favorite two lines are “he’s itching to write” and “he’s doggone depressed”
It’s such a delight and the meter is Stantastic!

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Here are other variations of quatrain rhyme scheme.
For example:
ABAB
I ate the chip.
It made me want
to do a flip;
a silly stunt!

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For example:
AABB uses two couplets
The apple is a yummy snack
to eat while sitting on a yack.
Remember, though, to share a bite
This will prevent a yack-snack fight.

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For example:
AAAB
My brother is always annoying and loud.
My mother believes that his head’s in a cloud.
He really embarrasses me in a crowd.
I wish he would just go to sleep.For example:

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AABA
A pickle is crunchy when you take a bite.
The noise is so loud, I think that it might
cause mountains to topple and elm trees to fall.
This is a good reason for pickle-bite fright!

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ABBA this is called an envelope verse, the middle rhyme is enveloped by the outer rhymes.
Word on the street is it’s going to rain.
I’m a sad fella,
sans my umbrella.
I am preparing to get wet again!

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Longer stanzas are made up of various combinations of the couplet, tercet and quatrain.

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There are obviously many combinations that can be used in different stanzas. One I came across is called a Spenserian stanza. It was invented by Edmund Spenser. Each stanza contains nine lines in total: eight lines in iambic pentameter followed by a single ‘alexandrine’ line in iambic hexameter. The rhyme scheme of these lines is “ababbcbcc.” Whew! That’s quite a poetry puzzle! I dare you… LOL

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Resources:
http://examples.yourdictionary.com/stanza-examples.html
http://www.mrdaley.com/wordpress/poetry/stanza/

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Writing Prompt: Write what appeals to you with the examples above. Writing the AABA and the AAAB were the most fun for me!

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Saturday Schmaterday…Who’s up for Some Poetry and Picture Books?

One week of poetry & rhyme down…4 to go!

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I am tired but energized if that makes any sense! As I think I mentioned in one of the blogs, I am a night owl, HOOooo writes at night and sleeps during the day. It’s just how my brain functions best and with 4 kids, it is the only quiet time in the house. It works pretty well with our weekly schedule but weekends are difficult. I’m hoping I will find a few minutes today to actually read some picture books and do some of the writing prompts as I’ve been too busy writing future lessons and posting the daily blog posts.  I’ve thoroughly enjoyed everyone’s comments and I wish I could reply to them all. Just know that I am reading every one of them and it warms my heart to hear that you are enjoying this as much as I am. I also appreciate the humor that makes me giggle. The poem with An – gee was priceless and I have read it several times…Even Helen Frost like that one!

 

Don’t forget the Rhyming Party tomorrow on Facebook at noon.(Central Time) We will play some silly games and only be able to comment in rhyme. It is hilarious good fun! If you want to join the RhyPiBoMo Facebook Group, please request to join several hours before the party because I won’t be able to add you immediately before the event.

RhyPiBoMo Rhyming Party

Don’t forget to enter The Golden Quill Poetry Contest

Click the tab above that says “Golden Quill Poetry Contest” to enter. That is where you go to send your poem. There is no registration for this contest, just copy and paste your poem in the contact form and send it to me. There are quite a few rules as we are learning about poetry with all its rules, I didn’t want you  to think I was being soft on you! I have received several poems already. Please make sure you follow ALL the directions, especially leaving your first and last name as well as a contact email address or phone number so i can contact you if you are one of the winners.  Any poem that does not follow all the rules will be disqualified. AND…you may only enter one poem. Maybe next year we will have multiple categories but I needed to keep it simple this year. Good luck and may Willy S. be looking over your shoulder!  For contest details: https://angiekarcher.wordpress.com/rhypibomo-golden-quill-poetry-contest/

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Today’s guest blogger mentions in her post that she is “a writer who rhymes. No claim to being a poet.” There are many of us that can completely relate to that! I’m thrilled that she is here, not to defend herself, but to share her wisdom about writing rhyme…her work speaks for itself and needs no defending whatsoever!

 

So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Denise Fleming

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Crunch, munch, caterpillars lunch…

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Growing up I chanted nursery rhymes. I listened to a lot of broadway show tunes, because my mom was active in local theatre and every now and then she would be in a musical. My sister and I would learn the lyrics and would sing along with Mom. My dad listened to jazz and the blues and we sang along to that. So my background is made up of song lyrics. Lots of near rhyme, single syllable rhyme and rhythm. I feel rhythm is a big part of a good picture book text. Picture books are theatre—are meant to be read aloud.

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When I started writing and illustrating picture books, I had only taken one workshop. A great 10 day workshop with Uri Schulevitz, Writing with Pictures, which introduced me to how to create a complete picture book. I remember him saying don’t write in rhyme, there is too much bad rhyme out there, and don’t use a lot of color because it will cancel itself out and end up being another form of B&W. Well, no worry, I hadn’t planned on writing BAD rhyme and color was my thing, so that surely didn’t apply to me. My first book was In The Tall, Tall Grass, written in rhyme, packed with color. It did exceptionally well. So I merrily went on rhyming and using lots of color.

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Then FB came along and all these blog posts were written and come to find out that I was doing BAD things like one syllable rhyme and near rhyme, and that I did not know a lot of the terms I was supposed to know. Good lord, I was setting a very bad example! Then Angie Karcher posted about RhyPiBoMo. And I signed up, because someone needed to defend me. I am a writer who rhymes. No claim to being a poet.

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Some of my books are rhyming. Others are not because they just wouldn’t work. Time To Sleep started as a rhyming text, but I had too much info to impart. I would have had to force rhyme. Instead, I used a refrain, “winter is on its way,” to tie the story together.

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In The Tall, Tall Grass is a rhyming chant. The reader is watching creatures all around going about their lives: “Crunch, munch caterpillars lunch / Dart, dip,hummingbirds sip.”

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Barnyard Banter is rollicking verse. A goose is running around chasing a butterfly. Everybody is where they should be except goose: “Cows in the pasture, moo, moo, mom, moo / Roosters in the barnyard, cock a doodle doo.” Where Once There Was A Wood is about an area of land that has been leveled for a housing development: “Where once there was a wood, a meadow and a creek / Where once the red fox rested and closed his eyes to sleep.” All three books are written in simple rhyme, but each one has a particular rhythm to evoke a particular mood.

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It is hard to explain BAD RHYME to people. For some reason people seem to think if you are going to write for children you must rhyme. NO. They also think that if you have sentences that rhyme and you string them together with no real intent or purpose that works. NO. Nonsense rhyme. NO (leave that to those who know what they are doing).
If you have a manuscript written in rhyme, look at it honestly. Drop the rhyme, write it in prose—Does it make sense? Is it clearer? Were you forcing the rhyme?

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My advice is to read a lot of poetry. There are some wonderful poets that write for children. Read collections. Get out those sticky notes and mark the poems you like. Analyze why you like those particular poets. Read adult poets. And when you read, read out loud. Read with expression. Enjoy yourself!

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Bio:
Denise Fleming is the award-winning author and illustrator of many well known children’s books including In the Tall, Tall Grass and In the Small, Small Pond, which received a Caldecott Honor and her most recent book Underground.
As a young girl, Denise used to spend hours in her father’s workshop cutting, gluing, carving and building things. Today, she spends many hours in her own workshop studio, cutting, gluing and creating her picture books. Denise’s unique papermaking technique Is a labor-intensive process that involves hauling buckets of water, mixing and dying cotton fiber pulp. She then pours pulp through hand-cut stencils to form her bold, textured Illustrations. Denise’s love of language is apparent in her writing which combines rhythm, rhyme and lots of verbs. Denise Fleming’s books get kids laughing and loving reading.
Denise is a graduate of Kendall College of Art and Design in Michigan. Along with her husband and daughter, Denise lives in Ohio. Her books are a family effort as together they review words, pictures and ideas for new books. For more information about Denise Fleming and her books, visit her online at http://www.denisefleming.com.

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Thank you Denise Fleming!

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Saturday, April 5th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 7

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There are 3 basic genres of poetry: Lyrical, Narrative and Dramatic

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Lyrical Voice

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Lyrical Voice is the voice of the poet coming through in the written poem.
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A lyrical poem expresses the emotions and feelings of a poet. It is used to express a personal how the poem views the world around him/her and of personal experiences. The poet puts him or herself in the poem. Lyrical voice is the most common voice used by poets.
This is where we get the word lyrics – the words of songs – this associates poetry with music. It is derived from a musical instrument called the lyre that was used to accompany the reading of this type of poem. The lyrical poem was set to music.
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A Lyre is a small, stringed, harp-like instrument played mostly in ancient Egypt, Israel and Greece.
This can most often be identified by the use of the words I, me, my, mine, we, our, ours, and us
Interestingly, poetry has changed over the years in many ways but one noticeable difference from original poetry is that today poetry is mostly read silently. Years ago, poetry was sung or read aloud in poetry readings or plays. It was a social experience enjoyed by many writers and non-writers of the day. Of course, poetry readings are held today but are not nearly the social gatherings as they once were.

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Sadly, a written poem can be compared to the written, musical score of a song. The joy is in hearing the notes played by instruments as there is joy in hearing the words said out loud. This allows for expressiveness, dramatic accents, pacing, and much more.
I had never thought about how our culture today is missing out on this art form of poetry…the oral sharing of a poem and the music of language.

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Narrative Voice

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Narrative Voice is the poet telling the story through the written word. (write this down)
The narrative voice tells a story. These stories may be humorous, sad, nonsensical, epic, or as simple as a nursery rhyme. The narrator is the storyteller. The story may be complete fantasy or it may be true but the poet never puts him or herself in the narrative poem.
A narrative poem typically uses a simple meter, such as a couplet (2 line stanza) or a quatrain. (4 line stanza)
They usually have a simple rhyme scheme…

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A narrative poem typically uses a light meter for a humorous poem and a more structured, rigid meter for a serious poem.
Sometimes they are written in free verse.

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Free verse poetry is written without rhyme and doesn’t follow any poetic form. (write this down)

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It is full of emotion that is expressed in alliteration, consonance, internal rhyme and/or repetition. There are really no rules but some poets create their own rules.

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An example:
This is one of my all-time favorite poems so I had to post it!

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Casey at the Bat by Ernest Lawrence

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The outlook wasn’t brilliant for the Mudville Nine that day;
The score stood four to two, with but one inning more to play,
And then when Cooney died at first, and Barrows did the same,
A sickly silence fell upon the patrons of the game.

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A straggling few got up to go in deep despair. The rest
Clung to that hope which springs eternal in the human breast;
They thought, if only Casey could get but a whack at that –
They’d put up even money, now, with Casey at the bat.

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But Flynn preceded Casey, as did also Jimmy Blake,
And the former was a pudding and the latter was a fake;
So upon that stricken multitude grim melancholy sat,
For there seemed but little chance of Casey’s getting to the bat.

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But Flynn let drive a single, to the wonderment of all,
And Blake, the much despised, tore the cover off the ball;
And when the dust had lifted, and the men saw what had occurred,
There was Jimmy safe at second and Flynn a-hugging third.

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Then from 5,000 throats and more there rose a lusty yell;
It rumbled through the valley, it rattled in the dell;
It knocked upon the mountain and recoiled upon the flat,
For Casey, mighty Casey, was advancing to the bat.

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There was ease in Casey’s manner as he stepped into his place;
There was pride in Casey’s bearing and a smile on Casey’s face.
And when, responding to the cheers, he lightly doffed his hat,
No stranger in the crowd could doubt ’twas Casey at the bat.

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Ten thousand eyes were on him as he rubbed his hands with dirt;
Five thousand tongues applauded when he wiped them on his shirt.
Then while the writhing pitcher ground the ball into his hip,
Defiance gleamed in Casey’s eye, a sneer curled Casey’s lip.

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And now the leather-covered sphere came hurtling through the air,
And Casey stood a-watching it in haughty grandeur there.
Close by the sturdy batsman the ball unheeded sped-
“That ain’t my style,” said Casey. “Strike one,” the umpire said.

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From the benches, black with people, there went up a muffled roar,
Like the beating of the storm-waves on a stern and distant shore.
“Kill him! Kill the umpire!” shouted someone on the stand;
And it’s likely they’d a-killed him had not Casey raised his hand.

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With a smile of Christian charity great Casey’s visage shone;
He stilled the rising tumult; he bade the game go on;
He signaled to the pitcher, and once more the spheroid flew;
But Casey still ignored it, and the umpire said, “Strike two.”

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“Fraud!” cried the maddened thousands, and echo answered fraud;
But one scornful look from Casey and the audience was awed.
They saw his face grow stern and cold, they saw his muscles strain,
And they knew that Casey wouldn’t let that ball go by again.

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The sneer is gone from Casey’s lip, his teeth are clenched in hate;
He pounds with cruel violence his bat upon the plate.
And now the pitcher holds the ball, and now he lets it go,
And now the air is shattered by the force of Casey’s blow.

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Oh, somewhere in this favored land the sun is shining bright;
The band is playing somewhere, and somewhere hearts are light,
And somewhere men are laughing, and somewhere children shout;
But there is no joy in Mudville — mighty Casey has struck out.

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Hey Diddle Diddle

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Hey diddle diddle,
The cat and the fiddle,
The cow jumped over the moon.
The little dog laughed,
To see such sport,
And the dish ran away with the spoon

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Old Mother Hubbard
http://www.rhymes.org.uk/old_mother_hubbard.htm

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Jabberwocky by Lewis Carroll
http://www.jabberwocky.com/carroll/jabber/jabberwocky.html

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Sarah Cynthia Sylvia Stout Would Not Take the Garage Out by Shel Silverstein

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Jimmy Jet and his TV Set by Shel Silverstein
http://shelsilversteinpoems.wordpress.com/2012/01/22/jimmy-jet-and-his-tv-set/

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Dramatic Voice has several forms…Apostrophe, The Mask and Conversation

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Apostrophe is a dramatic voice where the poet talks to inanimate objects that cannot answer.

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Who has the better right
To smell the first summer rose,
Bee – you or I?

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For example:
O Captain! My Captain! by Walt Whitman
http://www.famousliteraryworks.com/whitman_o_captain_my_captain.htm

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The Mask is when a poet pretends to be someone else and takes on their thoughts, their words, their life…This can be another person or an object.

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For example:
Message From a Caterpillar by Lilian Moore
Don’t shake this bough.
Don’t try to wake me now.
In this cocoon I’ve work to do.
Inside this silk I’m changing things.
I’m worm-like now but in this dark I’m growing wings.

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How to write a mask poem
http://ettcweb.lr.k12.nj.us/forms/mask.htm

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Conversation is when two different voices talk back and forth to each other.
Often conversation poems are written in a way that you have to guess who is talking.
A more recent name for this seems to be a dialogue poem.

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Sock and Shoe Speak
“Oh no!” said my sock,
“What a smell!
You need a bath, Mr. Shoe.
I can tell!”

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“I’m leather,” said Shoe.
“I don’t smell.
Your dryer sheet stinks!
I’m unwell!”

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“I need a clothespin,”
said the sock.
“It’s the only way
we will walk.”

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Shoe laughed and he smiled
“With no nose,
Sock, what will you do?
Hold your toes?”

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I tugged on my shoe
“They’re so tight!
Would you both please
stop with this fight!”

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For example:

There is a fourth genre of poetry called The Didactic form. A Didactic poem teaches a lesson or involves a moral dilemma. It is also considered instructional poetry meant to teach lessons on science, math, philosophy, etc.

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Examples of Didactic poems:
http://www.thehypertexts.com/Best%20Didactic%20Poems.htm

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Another Resource:
Poems for Kids
http://poemsforchildren.org/index.htm

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Writing Prompt: Choose a genre of poetry and write a poem that fits into the rules for that genre.

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Okay, now do everything else on the pledge for today and don’t forget to comment on today’s blog post!

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To be eligible for a prize you must be a registered participant and
comment after each days lessons.

It’s…Fasten Your Seat Belt Friday!

It’s Fasten Your Seat Belt Friday!

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What does that mean? Well, we are 6 days in and it’s not going to get any easier!  Poetry is not for the weak of heart!

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I’m sure, at this point, some of you are reconsidering your choice to be here and that’s okay. These lessons are time consuming and involved if you are doing absolutely everything offered here. I don’t expect that you are, nor should you expect that of yourself. You should make it what works for you.

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I felt your same frustration weeks ago when I began writing these lessons. I promise they are as tight as I could get them and still give a full explanation of the concepts. We won’t even talk about all the exceptions to the rules! Think of RhyPiBoMo as a buffet…take what you like, try a few things you’ve never tasted before and come back for the dessert, which I think will be the picture book part of this event.  I have no expectations of anyone but myself and I’m thrilled to have so many writers attend the feast. Please remember…it’s not polite to say you don’t like something…try it and spit it out quietly on your plate if it doesn’t taste good.

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The daily pledge requirements are not that time consuming; read the blog posts, comment, write a poem, read a rhyming picture book. The rest offered here is a bonus! You can save it, look at it later, catch up when you can, or ignore it completely…make it work for you and your journey.

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If you need to quietly bow out now, we all understand. You may just quit commenting on the blog and consider yourself removed from this process.  I hope you can find the time to join us next year!

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The only one who has any complete commitment to this event is me as I decided last November to dedicate myself to learning everything I can about poetry and writing rhyme. I decided that if I was going to do all this research and spend all this time reading and studying poetry/rhyme, that I should invite some writing friends to join me…it snowballed from there. And RhyPiBoMo was born.

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I hope that you can take what works for you from these lessons and apply it to your writing.

I hope that you are learning something that you didn’t know before you got here.

I hope that you are writing poetry.

I hope that you are reading picture books.

I hope that you are meeting new writing friends in our Facebook Group.

I hope that you are being introduced to amazing guest bloggers that will inspire you.

I hope that you are working on a rhyming picture book  manuscript.

I hope that you have joined or are in a rhyming critique group.

I hope that even if you step away from this event you will continue to learn and grow with your writing.

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I hope you stay.

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RhyPiBoMo Mission Statement:
My goal is to guide those aspiring to write rhyme and poetry through the process of learning the craft and offering resources, lessons, writing prompts and the wisdom of experienced folks in the business to improve the reputation and quality of rhyme and poetry for children.

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Today’s guest blogger is a friend I met while taking The Hero’s Art Journey Course with Mira Reisberg and Maya Gonzalaz at the Children’s Book Academy. She is a writer, a photographer, an educator, an artist and an editor…and very talented in all her endeavors. She is going to cover something very important about poetry and rhyming picture books, especially if you want teachers to use your books in the classroom.

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Mary A Livingston

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Common Core State Standards and Rhyming Picture Books

by Mary A Livingston

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Recently, I’ve been working with a team of educators to make some select locally published picture books Common Core State Standards (CCSS) ready. One of the eight titles we’re creating CCSS Modules for is a rhyming picture book.
The rhyming picture book CCSS Module has a little more meat when compared to its prose counterparts.

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At first I focused on the K-5 standards when looking for rhyme applications, but two members of our team are middle school teachers, both use rhyming picture books to reacquaint their older students to meter, rhythm, and rhyme prior to working in their grade level texts. One stated, “Using picture books is a fun, non-intimidating way to introduce literary concepts to my older students.”

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Common Core State Standards (http://www.corestandards.org) specifically referencing rhyme:

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English Language Arts Standards » Reading: Foundational Skills » Kindergarten
Phonological Awareness:
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.RF.K.2.a
Recognize and produce rhyming words.

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English Language Arts Standards » Reading: Literature » Grade 2
Craft and Structure:
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.RL.2.4
Describe how words and phrases (e.g., regular beats, alliteration, rhymes, repeated lines) supply rhythm and meaning in a story, poem, or song.

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English Language Arts Standards » Reading: Literature » Grade 7
Craft and Structure:
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.RL.7.4
Determine the meaning of words and phrases as they are used in a text, including figurative and connotative meanings; analyze the impact of rhymes and other repetitions of sounds (e.g., alliteration) on a specific verse or stanza of a poem or section of a story or drama.

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Rhyming picture books also add benefit in categories referencing verse, rhythm, and meter:
English Language Arts Standards » Reading: Literature » Grade 4
Craft and Structure:
CCSS.ELA-Literacy.RL.4.5
Explain major differences between poems, drama, and prose, and refer to the structural elements of poems (e.g., verse, rhythm, meter) and drama (e.g., casts of characters, settings, descriptions, dialogue, stage directions) when writing or speaking about a text.

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A positive aspects of CCSS is the integration of literature into the curriculum, both fiction and nonfiction. We all know wonderful teachers who’ve already adapted their teaching style to include literature in the classroom. The integration of outside literature as part of a core curriculum now requires documentation to substantiate how the literature addresses CCSS. Many teachers I’ve spoken with have expressed concern about additional paperwork related to citation requirements of CCSS. Unless the teacher uses only canned curriculum ready materials, CCSS means a lot of additional paperwork for the teacher when citing exactly how the book and supported materials fit the standard. The canned curriculum may be limiting and not able to address local needs. By Implementing Common Core Ready Modules provides teacher, parents, and librarians with documentation and guidelines to support CCSS when using a title in the classroom.

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Some publishers are adding CCSS content specifically for their published titles, thus adding market value and aiding teachers who wish to integrate those titles into the classroom.

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I encourage picture book authors to be aware of CCSS. The full text of Common Core State Standards is at http://www.corestandards.org. Some states have added modified components. For specific state variations, use the search term: state name common core. If your rhyming picture book is CCSS ready, it increases market value and helps parents, teachers and librarians make the common core connection.

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More resources on Common Core:
Common Core State Standards Initiative – http://www.corestandards.org
Cut to the Core – http://www.scoop.it/t/cutothecore
Common Core Toolkit (NY) – http://www.engageny.org/resource/common-core-toolkit
Common Core State Standards (CA) – http://www.cde.ca.gov/re/cc/
Children’s Book Academy, the site search “common core” returns several articles- http://www.childrensbookacademy.com

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Bio:
A Gelett Burgess Children’s Book Award recipient and California Federation of Chaparral Poets honoree, Mary, grew up in the forested communities of Humboldt and Trinity Counties of northern California. She attended Shasta College, Humboldt State University, and Loyola University. She has worked in photography, education, publishing, and liturgical design. Her career in children’s literature focuses on nature and environmental education. Fall 2014, she will be teaching a Children’s Book Academy course Using InDesign for Picture Book Dummies and e-Books.

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Website: http://www.maryalivingston.com
Blog: http://www.backdoorartist.com
Blogs every third Friday: http://www.childrensbookacademy.com/blogettes.html
Facebook: http://www.facebook.com/maryalivingston.backdoorartist
Twitter: @BackdoorArtist
LinkedIn: http://www.linkedin.com/pub/mary-a-livingston/87/22/265

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Thank you Mary A Livingston!

 

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Friday April 4th

By Angie Karcher © 2014

Lesson 6

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Sestina

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A Sestina is a French form of poetry believed to have been invented by Arnaut Daniel, a troubadour from France.
A troubadour was a composer and performer that mainly wrote songs about chivalry and courtly love. There were troubadour schools that emerged in the early 12th century in England, France, Italy and other European countries.
I want to be a troubadour! It sounds very romantic. Technically, I would be called a trobairitz as a female performer. I like the word troubadour better…

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As we are learning to follow rules of poetry, I thought it would be interesting to try our luck at writing some poetry that doesn’t rhyme but has crazy rules about the ending words of each line.

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End word – the last word in the line of the poem. (write this down)

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A sestina is traditional form of poetry
In a sestina there are repeating end words in VERY specific patterns.
The sestina repeats words, not sounds.
Sestinas do not rhyme
You choose 6 words that will be repeated throughout the entire poem at the end of each line.
Usually all the lines have the same number of syllables.

There are Six stanzas with six lines each. Sestet – a stanza with 6 lines. (write this down)

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Other forms similar to a sestina are a villanelle and a pantoum. We will not talk about these but you might want to research them on your own.

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I’m sure there are reasons why the words are placed in this certain order and these decisions were made hundreds of years ago by some very serious poets.
That being said, I don’t know why the words must be in this order so…we will just follow the rules.

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Let’s have fun with this! Think of it as a puzzle that you are trying to work…

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Here…is the pattern of end words.
This is a technique known as “lexical repetition.”
You don’t have to write that down! LOL

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Here is the order of the end words for each stanza:
Stanza 1: ABCDEF
Stanza 2: FAEBDC
Stanza 3: CFDABE
Stanza 4: ECBFAD
Stanza 5: DEACFB
Stanza 6: BDFECA

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This is a different graphic to help explain the same thing, the pattern of the end words.

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sestina image 2

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sestina

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Rules:

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1)Choose 6 words
Some people choose related words and some pick the first 6 words that pop into their head.
2)Follow the rules for placement of those 6 words at the end of each line.

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After I choose my 6 words, I list them in the order according to the rules, where they will remain as the end word for each line. After all the words are in place I go back and begin to write each line, knowing that the word listed must be the end word. Seeing them all sitting there, top to bottom, helps me to focus on the story. It gives me somewhere to go and helps me to connect the words.

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To complete the sestina, there is one more stanza after the 6 stanzas called an envoi. I will address this after we have learned how to write the main part of the sestina…

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I wrote this sestina after attending an SCBWI workshop in Brown County, Indiana many years ago. Helen Frost gave a talk on her poetry techniques.
I was hooked but haven’t looked at this in years. It was challenging yet fun to try to make it work with ALL the rules and have it make sense as a story.

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I’m not saying it works…just that I tried to make it work! LOL
We will go through this poem step-by-step as an example of how to organize the end words. Hold on tight…here we go!

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STEP-BY-STEP EXAMPLE:

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WHITE PICKET FENCE

My 6 end words

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A fence
B life
C house
D worked
E ocean
F rust

*These words are assigned to each letter. Where that letter goes in the pattern, that word must go!

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Here are the end word rules again.  Refer back often to these rules until you have your words in the right order.

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Stanza 1: ABCDEF
Stanza 2: FAEBDC
Stanza 3: CFDABE
Stanza 4: ECBFAD
Stanza 5: DEACFB
Stanza 6: BDFECA

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Stanza 1ABCDEF

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Now I start writing the first line…

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A Paint was silently peeling on the white picket fence.
B It stood, weakly, wearing gray with white patches, just like Megs life,
C chipped and sad. Her parents rented out her grandmother’s beach house,
D knowing that people who took vacations would come. It worked.
E Everyone, but Meg, loved the relaxing breeze of the ocean.
F The salt water made everything rust.

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The next stanza must follow this pattern with the end words.
Stanza 2 FAEBDC

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F The screen door, the hammock chains, the car fender; rusted.
A The sandy yard was surrounded by this rickety old fence.
E Leaning. Falling. Sad. Except for the sturdy gate to the ocean.
B The fence needed paint. So did Meg’s life.
D Chaos and joy. Madness and Glee. It worked,
C Dysfunctional and loud; her life. She wanted a pristine white picket fence at her house.

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The next stanza must follow this pattern with the end words.
Stanza 3 CFDABE

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C She ached to abandon this tired house
F for something better. Leave behind the rust.
D Meg dodged their storms like a ship lost in the ocean
A and it’s permanent harm. Nothing worked
B here. Her parents needed the fence
E between them. They fought everyday of her life.

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The next stanza must follow this pattern with the end words.
Stanza 4 ECBFAD

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E Today she felt an ocean
C of emotions. In the newly-rented, beach house
B there was a family with a great life.
F Somehow, they didn’t notice the rust.
A They never saw an old, worn out picket fence.
D To tourists, it was charming and quaint. It worked.

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The next stanza must follow this pattern with the end words.
Stanza 5 DEACFB

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D Meg heard the car door slam, as her dad left for work.
E She felt waves of relief crashing in her ocean.
A She saw chips of old paint falling from the old fence.
C The gate stood up strong, facing the house.
F Strangely, it was the only part of the fence that fought the rust.
B Meg imagined running through the gate to find new life.

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The next stanza must follow this pattern with the end words.
Stanza 6 BDFECA

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B A coat of paint would give the fence new life.
D Would it be worth all that work?
F The paint would only hide the peeling and the rust.
E It wouldn’t take long for the ocean’s
C wind and sun to attack once again. Soon Meg’s house
A will look the same as the fence.

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My envoi:
BE

She knew her life would wash away like the waves on the ocean.

DC

Nothing worked here; the anger and dysfunction were locked in the beach house.

FA

The rust, might free her from what kept her here, inside this white picket fence.

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I just realized that I forgot the rule about each line having the same syllables…that gives me something to work on!

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Sestina image 1

This is another chart showing the order of the end words. 

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Now, we will tackle the envoi

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Envoi – The envoi is the last stanza consisting of 3 lines using the same previous 6 end words one or more times.
The traditional order of the end words in the three lines is BE, DC, FA
The first word used is somewhere within the line, the second word is the end word. (write this down)

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Rules for the envoi:
BE
DC
FA

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So that puts my words in this order of usage:
life, ocean
worked, house
rust, fence

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The second word of each pair is the end word.
BE life, ocean
DC worked, house
FA rust, fence

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Thus…my envoi:
BE She knew her life would wash away like the waves of the ocean.
DC Nothing worked here; the anger and dysfunction were locked in the beach house.
FA The rust might free her from what kept her here, inside this cagey fence.

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This is very dramatic for me and I have never written anything this emotional before or since writing this poem. Those 6 words forced me to dig deep to find emotions and to be clever with their usage. Using a varied form of a chosen word is permitted.
To give this poem something unique, or my special touch, I added a rule. Look back at the first stanza, notice the first letter of each line going down.
Each line begins with the letters in the word picket, spelling downward.
The title of the poem is White Picket Fence.
It’s something I did consciously but not without a great deal of time and effort.
Once you are committed to following rules, it becomes very freeing in a strange way. The limit to the word usage really forces the writer to be clever and creative and thrifty with the words when telling the story. You know what the last word is…let the story take you there in each line.

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You must read Helen Frost’s books but particularly Keesha’s House to see

how amazingly good she is at writing poetic forms.

Keeshas house

http://www.amazon.com/s/?ie=UTF8&keywords=keesha+house&tag=mh0b-20&index=stripbooks&hvadid=1696691885&ref=pd_sl_8hmlmea59f_ee

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Keesha’s House is written in strict poetic forms and there are wonderful sestinas throughout. Another favorite of mine is The Braid. Helen has invented her own poetic form for this book. The words are literally braided throughout each poem!

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More examples:
Here is a sestina titled Sestina by Dante Alighieri
http://famouspoetsandpoems.com/poets/dante_alighieri/poems/44

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Here is another one titled Sestina by Elizabeth Bishop
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/sestina/

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This is a diagram that explains the pattern for the changing end word rules. Honestly, this confuses me as I am fine to just plug in the assigned word at the end of each line and then come back and write the line. I added this image because we all learn in different ways so maybe it will be helpful to you.

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sestina image 3

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Writing Prompt: Now it’s your turn! Write a Sestina
Choose 6 words and fill in the blanks.

List your 6 words
A _______________
B _______________
C _______________
D _______________
E _______________
F _______________

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These are your 6 end words. Now, follow the rules and see what happens.
Who knows where this will take you! Good Luck!

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Why learn about writing a Sestina? They don’t even rhyme…
Because…it will help us understand about traditional poetry structure, methods and patterns. It will help us become more well-rounded writers in general and help us to learn other patterns and rules in poetry as we go along.

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Sonnet

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The sonnet originated in Italy. In Italian, sonnet means “little bird or little song.”
It is the most flexible and common poem of fixed poems
There are 3 common types of sonnets written; Petrarchan, Shakespearean, and Spenserian.
In honor of Willy S. we will learn the Shakespearean form which is of course the English sonnet.

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Rules for a Sonnet:
It has 14 lines
Written in iambic-pentameter
The first 8 lines are called the Octave.
A problem or the question is set up in these 8 lines.
The 9th line is called the volta.
It is the line that changes the shift from problem to solution.
The last 6 lines are called the Sestet. A resolution or response to the octave occurs here.

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There are other rules that are more specific to the content and what each stanza is supposed to say. As this is all new to many of us, I will not go into more detail about that but please venture on if you are interested.

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Iambic Pentameter (write this down)

An unstressed/stressed foot is known as an iamb. Remember…da-DUM.
Penta means 5 feet
It has 10 syllables.
So a line of poetry written in pentameter has 5 feet, or 5 sets of stressed and unstressed syllables da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM

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For example:
if we | can see | the sun | be-hind | the clouds
da DUM | da DUM | da DUM | da DUM | da DUM

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Often, in Shakespearean plays high class characters speak in iambic pentameter; lower class characters speak in prose. (I thought this was very interesting.)

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For example:
A Shakespearean sonnet from Romeo and Juliet
Now old desire doth in his death-bed lie,
And young affection gapes to be his heir;
That fair for which love groan’d for and would die,
With tender Juliet match’d, is now not fair.
Now Romeo is belov’d and loves again,
Alike bewitched by the charm of looks,
But to his foe suppos’d he must complain,
And she steals love’s sweet bait from fearful hooks:
Being held a foe, he may not have access
To breathe such vows as lovers us’d to swear;
And she as much in love, her means much less
To meet her new-beloved anywhere:
But passion lends them power, time to meet,
Temper extremity with extreme sweet.

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Writing exercise: See if you can identify the iambs, the pentas, the rhyme scheme, the octave, the volta and the sestet. This is our first quiz! Ha…you didn’t know there would be quizzes did you? Just kidding but try it anyway!

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Let’s explore Stanzas in more detail.
Stanzas have special names based upon the number of lines. (write this down)

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2 lines – Couplet
3 lines – Tercet
4 lines – Quatrain
5 lines – Quintet
6 lines – Sestet
7 lines – Septet
8 lines – Octave
9 lines – Nine-line stanza
10 line – Ten-line stanza etc…
Longer stanzas of poetry have a variety of couplets, tercets and quatrains.
These 3 are called the “Building Blocks” of poetry!

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Rhyme Scheme
The rhyme scheme for a Shakespearean sonnet is:
A-B-A-B-C-D-C-D-E-F-E-F-G-G

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The end words rhyme in this pattern. I think it helps to look at it in a vertical way to understand that each line must follow these rules for rhyming end words.

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For example:
A Shell
B Alone
A Dwell
B Stone
C Stroll
D Eve
C Knoll
D Weave
E Breeze
F Drops
E Tease
F Stops
G Find
G Mind

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My attempt at a sonnet:

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           IN SEARCH OF SOLACE
1)I search with eyes intent to find a shell.
2)The clouds roll in and leave us all alone.
3)My thoughts retreat from where they often dwell.
4)No shells today; one lost and lonely stone.
5)I slowly roam the beach; my nightly stroll.
6)In search of what is lost this bronzing eve.
7)The waving grass blows gently on the knoll.
8)The beauty and the sadness start to weave.
9)Then suddenly a brisk and violent breeze,
10)Just one, then two, then many rainy drops.
11)The lightning strike tonight is not a tease.
12)I rush back; causing searching now to stop.
13)And when you stop the search is when you find.
14)A shell and solace; smiling peace of mind.

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This needs lots of work as it is my original draft, but it was fun to keep all the rules going. Again, as when I write sestinas, I plugged in my rhyming end words first. I ended up changing one word…I changed well to dwell. This seems to help me immediately focus on a possible connection between the words and helps begin the story.

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Now it’s your turn!

Writing Prompt: Write an English Sonnet, Shakespearean Style!
May Willy S. be ever at your side!

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I had no idea that iambic-pentameter is something that I am very comfortable with…Over the years I’ve learned to play the clarinet, saxophone and piano. I am certain that this musical background helps me immensely with meter and rhythm.  This just happens to be one poetic form that I enjoy. I hope you find one that you enjoy too!

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                                                        Happy iams and pentas to you,

                                                                                          ~Angie

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Resources:
http://iambicpentameter.net/
http://www.sonnetwriters.com/how-to-write-a-sonnet/
http://www.dummies.com/how-to/content/writing-a-sonnet.html
http://www.sonnets.org/basicforms.htm

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Thirsty for Rhyme Thursday!

RhyPiBoMo is not canceled! I am the April Fool…

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Where do I start?

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Last night in the midst of a near panic attack because my blog post disappeared from my computer screen, (I’ll tell you about that in a sec) someone messaged me looking for the RhyPiBoMo Facebook page…they had been commenting on the Facebook EVENT page instead. I noticed several others had done the same thing but there were very few people checking those posts. SO…I decided to delete the EVENT page to eliminate confusion. The start date had passed so it didn’t occur to me that Facebook would send helpful emails notifying people that RhyPiBoMo had been cancelled. So much for making things less complicated!

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It is not a crisis of magnificent proportions but it was frustrating. I think everyone is still here…LOL Thanks for your patience!

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My earlier crisis was when I had 3/4 of the blog posted in the website and decided to go eat dinner. When I returned, the blog contents had disappeared completely. It’s a long story and technically ludicrous but…it was all still there…I just couldn’t see it! I hate cookies!

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I did manage with Google and WordPress support to find the ghost-like blog and continue posting on a different browser.

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I had a glass of wine with my whine after posting last night! LOL  = )

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Today someone asked a great question about contemporary cinquains and how they differ from traditional cinquains.  It seems that a line was left out that explains it. Thanks for catching that! It’s complete now so you can look back and check out the differences. It’s actually pretty cool, and challenging!

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Thanks to Vivian Kirkfield for helping gather a list of the picture books we are reading this week. She is compiling a list from a Facebook post. Please add the title and author’s first and last name so we can add them to a master of list…I wonder how many PBs we will read this month?

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Our guest blogger for today was the first poet I ever met. It was many years ago at an SCBWI Conference in Brown County, Indiana and she was on the faculty. I had been writing rhymes and stories for kids but had never been exposed to formal poetry. I was amazed, stunned and bewildered at what she could do with words. Last week I shared pictures of my office and mentioned that my most treasured books were lovingly placed together on the second shelf of my bookcase. Here are those books…

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Office 10

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If you really want to study poetry and are interested in the poetic forms

that we are learning, I recommend reading every one of her books!

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Helen Frost

Rhypibomo Guest Blogger Badge      Helen Frost 1

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How Not to Write a Rhyming Picture Book

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To make a rhyming picture book
look and look and look and look

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for exactly the right word
flying like a little bird

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across the page you’re trying to write.
Don’t quit until you get it right.

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And when you think that you are done
send it off and see what prize you’ve won.

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Please Do NOT attribute this “poem” to me.

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I wrote that in approximately two minutes. What could be easier, right?

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In each of those four stanzas I’ve done something wrong—at least one thing—how many can you identify? Take a few minutes to study that before reading on.

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Okay—let’s take this stanza by stanza:

Stanza one: Many beginning writers, even if they have a reasonably good ear for meter, add extraneous words to make the rhythm come out right. Look for “very” or “very, very” or unnecessary repetitions of words.

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Stanza two: Sometimes rhyme can lead you to a great metaphor or simile that you would never have found without it. This is not an example of that. A word is nothing like a little bird in this instance, and the comparison only serves to slow down the reader as they try to figure out how it might be apt. If you write something like this, and then figure out a way in which a word can be compared to a bird, go back and work on the poem until your metaphor or simile carries its meaning in a beautiful and seemingly effortless way (though of course it will not have been effortless).

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Stanza three: Rhyming homonyms will grate on most editors’ ears.

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homophone graphic

Apparently, there is a recent debate about the usage of homonym/homophone.  Helen kindly sent me the link to this article to explain the discussion. Thanks Helen!

http://www.vocabulary.com/dictionary/homonym

 

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Stanza four: Two things here, the first being a review of Stanza one. Would anyone actually include the word “that” if they were speaking this sentence? And: An almost-right metrical pattern is worse than no such pattern at all.

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Having said all this, there is a little nugget of good advice hidden within that bad writing. Do keep lookin for just the right words and images; don’t quit too soon; and when you’ve worked hard and written a poem that pleases you, send it off to a contest or to an editor. Let it offer it’s wisdom to the world, and may it bring joy back to you!

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Happy writing!
Helen Frost

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Here’s a page from a notebook where I was working on Step Gently Out.

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Bio:
Helen Frost worked for about twenty years as a poet before publishing her first poetry collection, supporting herself with work she also loves, that of a teacher–in elementary schools, as a poet-in-the-schools, and at the college level. Her books include seven novels-in-poems for children and young adults, two collections of poetry for adults, two plays, a book about teaching young people to write about difficult issues, two picture books for younger readers, and two anthologies. She continues her work with children and teens through school author visits, and is now a full-time writer, living in Fort Wayne, Indiana.

http://www.helenfrost.net

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Thursday April 3rd
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 5

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Haiku

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After yesterday’s long lesson I thought we’d visit something a bit more familiar today. Haiku is probably one of the most recognized forms of poetry.

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Haiku is Japanese lyric verse form having three unrhymed lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, traditionally invoking an aspect of nature or the seasons. (Write this down)

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Pagoda

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The Haiku form of poetry is hundreds of years old and was originated in Japan. Haiku has its own set of fairly strict rules.

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You need to know what a syllable is to write Haiku.

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Syllable – the slightest portion or amount of speech or writing, how many beats a word has.
For example: dog =1 syllable, apple = 2 syllables, tomato = 3 syllables

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Rules for Haiku:
1 It must be written about nature or refer to something to do with nature, for example, seasons or weather.
2 It must be written in the present tense form.
3 It should generate a picture in the reader’s mind about the subject.
4 It follows the 3 line syllable pattern of 5-7-5
5) It does not rhyme and words are not repeated

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Line 1 5 syllables
Line 2 7 syllables
Line 3 5 syllables 17 total syllables

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This is a different form of traditional poetry than cinquain but similar in the process. The more difficult form of Haiku has fewer words and more rules. This means every word must count! As picture book writers, we are familiar with this concept. We try to stay in a tight word count when writing a picture book…now you have to tell a story in 17 syllables.

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Here are a few examples:

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An old silent pond…
A frog jumps into the pond,
Splash! Silence again.
By Basho

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Autumn moonlight—
a worm digs silently
into the chestnut.
By Basho

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Lightning flash—
what I thought were faces
are plumes of pampas grass.
By Basho

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Falling to the ground,
I watch a leaf settle down
In a bed of brown.
Author unknown

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A summer river being crossed
how pleasing
with sandals in my hands!
By Yosa Buson

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More examples:
http://examples.yourdictionary.com/examples-of-haiku-poems.html

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Haiku poem

I thought this was so funny! Limerick humor… plus I’m sleep deprived!

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Helen Frost quote

Limerick

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A limerick is a short, humorous, nonsense poem.
(Write this down)

When I hear the word limerick, I immediately think of Ireland and leprechauns but Limericks were originated in England.
Supposedly the name is derived from Limerick, Ireland where there was a popular pub song with the refrain “Will you come up to Limerick?” Apparently, many the drunkard knew this tune and it was passed down through the years.

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Limericks are, oddly enough, one of the earliest forms of poetry for children. They are written with humor in mine and were a type of nursery rhyme and storytelling.

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The first line of a limerick traditionally introduces a person and a place, with the place appearing at the end of the first line and establishing the rhyme scheme for the second and fifth lines. In early limericks, the last line was often essentially a repeat of the first line, although this is no longer customary.

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Writing poetry is about following the rules of rhyme, rhythm and stressed and unstressed syllables. A limerick is a good example of rule following and begins us on our baby steps of learning the rules.

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DON’T LET ALL THE ODD NAMES OF THINGS INTIMIDATE YOU!

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Today, we are going to learn in depth about stressed and unstressed syllables, rhyme scheme, feet, meter, iamb and anapest.

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It’s not about remembering what they are called right now…it’s about understanding that each type of poem has a different rhythm and rhyming pattern.

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So for now, all we have to do is follow the rules!

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Keep a page in your notebook with definitions, rules, etc. so you can refer back if you need to.

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For the lesson today, we will also be doing MATH!

Yes, math is the key to understanding metrical feet and its different patterns.
If you can listen, count and track the stressed syllables, you will get this!

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Syllable – the slightest portion of a word or how many beats a word has.

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Example: dog =1 syllable, apple = 2 syllables, tomato = 3 syllables

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When you were learning to read, your teacher had you clap out the syllables of words to help you count how many beats there were in each word. This also helps you learn to listen to the word and its parts.

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When learning to write poetry, we study word sounds and their parts. We are talking about words with two or more syllables. Listen for the part of a word that has more emphasis, or stress on it, than the other part of the word.
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If you look in a dictionary the stressed part of the word is usually in boldface.

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For example:
Apple (ap – uhl)
Argue (ar – gyoo)
Artist (ar – tist)
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Try saying these words with the stress on the wrong syllable…

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Not correct

Ap-ple        Ar-gue          Ar-tist

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When the stress is on the wrong syllable, the words sound very strange and awkward and it’s certainly not how we pronounce them.

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FYI – I sometimes refer to a Scholastic Children’s Dictionary as it is very basic and has minimal definition…it gets to the point and is simply written. It is also easy to find the stress of the word syllables if you are unsure.

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dictionary

http://www.amazon.com/Scholastic-Childrens-Dictionary-Inc/dp/0439365635

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Now, let’s look at 3 syllable words …

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Potato (puh-tay-toh)
Pottery (pot-ur-ee)

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and 4 syllable words…
Preposition (prep-oh-zish-uhn)
Preoccupied (pree-ok-yuh-pide)

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Writing Exercise: Make lists of 2, 3 and 4 syllable words and then highlight the stressed syllable in each word. Add at least 10 words to each list so you get very comfortable finding the stressed syllable. You could guess and then check to see if you are right with a dictionary.

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Earlier this week we learned about Rhyme Scheme. Well rhyme scheme is very specific with a limerick.

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Rhyme Scheme is…
The pattern of rhymes used in a poem, usually marked by letters to symbolize corresponding rhyming end words.
The rhyme scheme for a limerick is AABBA.

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The basic rules for writing a limerick:

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1)A traditional limerick often starts out with, “There was once a…” but not always. As with any   rule, there are exceptions which we will talk about in a minute.

2)The ending of the first line is usually the name of a place, town, or country.

3)A Limerick is a 5 lined poem.

4)Lines 1,2 & 5 rhyme with each other.

5)Lines 3 & 4 rhyme with each other.

6)The first, second and fifth lines should have eight or nine syllables.

7)The third and fourth lines should have five or six.

8)Lines 1, 2 & 5 have 3 feet.

9)Lines 3 & 4 have 2 feet.

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What? Feet? Don’t Panic! WE WILL TALK ABOUT FEET NOW!

feet

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Remember, children write limericks so we can do this! Don’t shut down now and think this is too complicated! Think of it as a game or a puzzle. You have to take one rule at a time and make your words fit into those rules. It’s challenging and fun! This is where we listen for the stressed and unstressed syllables.

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Metrical Feet are a measurement of the sounds of words…it’s a way to measure the pattern of stressed and unstressed syllables in a word. (write this down)

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It sounds way more complicated than it really is…
A foot – is a unit of measurement that is repeated within a line of poetry. (write this down)

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For example:
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Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum

Even a nonsense word like dadadum has a stressed syllable.
If this was a line of poetry, it would have 3 metrical feet or 3 repeating patterns of sound.

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Da-da-dum is one foot

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I’m not sure measurement is the best word to use…it’s really just a way to identify, or group together, certain patterns of stressed and unstressed syllables.

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Da = an unstressed part of the word

Dum = the stressed part of the word…this part gets more emphasis when we say it.

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(If you compare this to music, a foot could be compared to the measures in music. When you put all the measures together, you get the whole song. If you play lots of sharps and flats, it might be Jazz. It you play lots of slow, melodic notes it might be a ballad. These are just names for the type of music.)

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This particular metrical foot is called an Anapest. An anapest is the name for a type of foot.

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An Anapest is the name of the pattern of sound in a poem with 2 unstressed syllables followed by a stressed syllable (da-da-dum) (write this down)

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Now, let’s just say that we had all one syllable words in a line of poetry.
One syllable words don’t have a stress. But…when they are put with other one syllable words the phrase has stressed words and unstressed words.

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For Example:
In the night on the dock I see stars
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum

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Now, mix the line with one and 2 syllable words.

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In the night there’s a tur-key who gob-bles at will
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum

Say it out loud so you hear the stressed word parts!

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Here’s another example:
Twas the night be-fore Christ-mas and all through the house
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum

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Meter – when you add all the feet together, that creates the meter of a poem. This is the rhythm or the cadence of the poem. It’s something you feel when you read it and it changes the way you say it compared to a prose phrase. (write this down)

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A limerick has a certain “rhythm” created by how the syllables are stressed.

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Many limericks have an Anapaest meter but not always.
(Just remember Da-da-dum!)

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Please visit this site and read about metrical feet over and over until it makes sense. There are diagrams of feet and everything!

The best explanation of metrical feet I’ve found is at Rhymeweaver.com
http://www.writingrhymeandmeter.com/?page_id=1880

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Now that we know about feet, we are back to the rules of a limerick.

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Here is a checklist of the rules for your convenience:

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□ 1)A traditional limerick often starts out with, “There once was a …”
□ 2)The ending of the first line is usually the name of a place, town, or country.
□ 3)A Limerick is a 5 lined poem.
□ 4)Lines 1,2 & 5 rhyme with each other.
□ 5)Lines 3 & 4 rhyme with each other.
□ 6)The first, second and fifth lines should have eight or nine syllables.
□ 7)The third and fourth lines should have five or six.
□ 8)Lines 1, 2 & 5 have 3 feet.
□ 9)Lines 3 & 4 have 2 feet.

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Refer to the rules above with this nonsense poem and see if we have followed all the rules.

Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dee
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dee
Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum

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Yes, by George, I think we’ve got it!

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Here is an example of a traditional limerick with Anapest meter.

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There was once a young fel-low of Wall
Who grew up so a-maz-ing-ly tall
That his friends dug a pit
Where he’d happ-i-ly sit
When he wished to con-verse with them all

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One of the exceptions: Sometimes a limerick might start out, “There once was a…” and that’s a different foot all together.

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This type of metrical foot is an iamb.

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An Iamb an unstressed-stressed pattern (write this down)

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Da-dum, Da-dum, Da-dum, Da-dum,
Many traditional limericks start with 1 iam followed by 2 anapests

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For Example: Da-dum, Da-da-dum, Da-da-dum

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Here is a traditional limerick with 1 iam and 2 anapest feet.

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There was a young wo-man named Bright,
Who tra-veled much fas-ter than light,
S0 she set off one day
In a rel-a-tive way
Re-turned on the pre-vi-ous night.

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Another example:
There once was a man from Nan-tuck-et,
Who kept all his cash in a buck-et,
But his daugh-ter, named Nan,
Ran a-way with a man,
And as for the buck-et, Nan-tuck-et.

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Up to this point, I have been signifying the stressed syllable with the color red.

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The proper way to signify an unstressed syllable is with the symbol ( ˇ ) and for a stressed syllable we use ( ʹ ) over each word.

For example:

Stress symbols

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My favorite resource book for learning about poetry so far is titled  POEM MAKING by Myra Cohn Livingston.

I highly recommend it!

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Here is the link:
http://www.amazon.com/Poem-Making-Ways-Begin-Writing-Poetry/dp/0060240199/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1396320950&sr=8-1&keywords=Poem+Making+by+Myra+Cohn+Livingston

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There are other common metrical feet that we will cover later this month. They are: dactyl, spondee, trochee.

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Today’s post was briefer than yesterday’s but it was full of more meat and potatoes! This may be one of the most important lessons to understand as the foundation to learning rhythm, meter and scansion are hiding here. Go back and read everything out loud now…that will help!

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I hope this is making you thirsty for more rhyme and poetry! We should have a lemonade social at the end of April…by then we will be professionals at making lemonade from all these sour, lemony, poetry lessons.

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Don’t think that you have to get it all in one day. We will be revisiting most of what we learned again later in the month.

Squeeze those lemons and add lots of sugar!

                   ~Angie

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Resources for Haiku and Limericks:

http://www.haiku.com/

http://www.poemhunter.com/poems/haiku/

http://www.famousliteraryworks.com/limericks.htm

http://www.poemhunter.com/poems/limerick

 

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Writing Prompt: Write a haiku and a limerick!  And have fun!

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Have a RhyPiBoMo Wednesday!

Welcome to Rhyming Wednesday!

I am thrilled with the participation on the blog and in the Facebook Group! You are all so generous with your comments and in sharing wonderful resources for the rest of us!

Writers are the best! Really !!

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*I wish I could help but unfortunately all the RhyPiBoMo Critique Groups are closed as of last Saturday.

So, if you are still in need of a group click the tab above that says “NEED A CRITIQUE GROUP”

Read and follow all the directions.

You will be on your own to find a group but this will allow you to connect with others who also want to join a group.

Please do not ask a question about critique groups in the comments as I am not able to help with this process due to time limitations and the amount of comments posted.

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Rebecca Kai Dotlich

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Rhypibomo Guest Blogger Badge        Rebecca Dotlich 1

Rebecca was so kind to call and ask what she should write for RhyPiBoMo. We tossed around a number of topics, but ultimately decided to share a wonderful blog post she wrote for Julie Hedlund’s 12 X 12 back in August, 2013. This information was a perfect fit for RhyPiBoMo…no need to reinvent the wheel here! She kindly sent a short note with her thoughts on writing rhyme…

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The note from Rebecca…

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A note to those trying to get into the children’s publishing world:
If writing is your passion, if you are dedicated and you work hard at your craft, don’t let anyone or anything discourage you enough to quit. I have always said, and still do, I would have written until the day I died. I would still be trying.
Publishing is the gold, the prize, the tip of the journey, but it isn’t THE journey. Writing is the journey; learning, getting lost in story and words, and working at your craft day after day, year after year.
BTW: Remember that most editors and agents discourage writers from writing and submitting rhyming picture books because they see so much that isn’t written professionally and with a good sense of meter and rhythm and most of all — those same manuscripts most likely incorporate forced or inverted rhyme.
But if you are trying to break in with a rhyming picture book, and you’re fairly certain you’ve conquered these obstacles, go for it! And keep going for it.
The most true TIP I have to offer: Read stacks of books in the genre you want to write. Rhyming picture books?
Read all the newer ones on the bookstore shelves — and all the traditional tried and true ones from the library shelves. Then read them again.
Then type them out and look at the text without illustrations.
Then read them again.
Then read them again.
Then read them again.

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And now, Rebecca’s blog post…

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FAR FROM THE SEA AND THE SALT IN THE AIR
Or
Using Poetic Devices to Create Picture Books

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The title of this post is a line from Barbara Cooney’s MISS RUMPHIUS. It is also a perfect line to demonstrate lyricism and the use of poetic devices found in picture books.

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These few words strung together make music; “. . . far from the sea and the salt in the air.” They also spark our imagination, and give an aura of wonder and mystery. This line could have been much less poetic. It could have been written like this: “She left home and went to live in another city that was miles away from the ocean.” That would have been a well-written line. But it just doesn’t evoke the same feeling.

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Often, writers mistakenly think alliteration is simply a succession of the same first letters of two or more words placed side by side on the page. And in an honest attempt to try and nail this poetic device, will mistakenly go for the neon-lighted-here-I-am-am kind of alliteration. (Robo the raccoon cooked creamy carrot soup.)

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In the example above, the f in far and from are indeed side by side on the page, but they fit there seamlessly. There are many ways this line could have been written. (A long way from, Out from, Away from, etc.) But joining the word far with from makes this line sing. It seems like such a simple thing. And often it is. And it’s what works.

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Same with the s in sea and salt. Still using the s but replacing shore for sea, you notice it doesn’t have that same poetic ring, that lyrical quality. Far from the shore and the salt in the air. Just isn’t the same, is it? Proving that all alliteration is not created equally. Sea and salt. Shore and salt. Listening to your word choices and lines aloud, over and over and over again, is the best way to determine if you have made the right choices. If not, it’s back to the drawing board.

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There are thousands of examples similar to this, of course. As you read through stacks of picture books you will discover them. You can’t ask for better teachers than the books themselves. There are brilliant articles and educators that will dive in and come out with a much better roadmap for a post like this than I can. But this is my roadmap, and I am, no doubt, trying to simplify a complex subject. But here are a few thoughts:

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As you craft your picture book, keep in mind all the tools and poetic devices at the ready; imagery, personification, metaphor, repetition. Rhyme and rhythm are two very important poetic tools, but by far not the only ones. As you are writing your picture book, listen to the sounds of the words. Remember that something lovely and lyrical (like the Cooney example, above) is only one way of adding a poetic feel to your picture book. Be aware of these poetic tools as you write, but not focused on them. And whatever you do, don’t demand your muse to use them all.

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Write sentences that flow organically, or seem to. They won’t really flow organically of course, but the goal is to make it look that way. The reader wants to feel like he isn’t stumbling or tripping over rhythm that is off, rhyme that is forced into a corner, or language that is so lovely-contrived, it ends up being jarring to both tongue and ear.

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Children love wordplay (palindromes, anagrams, spoonerisms, etc.,) but they also love to play with words (fascinating words, difficult words, clever, whimsical and silly words.) Dabble in the playground of fanciful and unexpected. Noodle in imagery; pull words from the magical pot called imagination. (Some people call it Thesaurus.) In truth, it’s both. And remember that every word counts. Every. Word.

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My rhyming picture book WHAT CAN A CRANE PICK UP? (Illustrated by Mike Lowery, Knopf, September 2012) began with one poetic device; repetition. I didn’t consciously do it, it just happened like most ideas: driving in the car, my grandson (then about 6 or 7) and I were talking as he pointed out construction sites, highway work, a crane lifting a concrete barrier:

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Ian: Can a crane pick up a crane?

Me: It sure can.

Ian: Can it pick up a truck?

Me: Yep, a truck too. (And then, being silly). . . and a truck, and

a truck, and a . . .

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And he laughed. (You had to be there.) And we proceeded to name all the things cranes might pick up. And we were making a book. We kept repeating it as we went, so we wouldn’t forget our collection of ideas. A part of the text reads like this: “. . . Watch as cranes with chains and hooks lift cartons and cages and library books! See the cranes with slings and straps lift cuckoo clocks and baseball caps.”

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I point this out to make a few points. The alliteration of cranes, cartons, cages, cuckoo clocks and caps would have been too much without the other words popped in to cushion them. This is only decided after many drafts and many readings aloud. The word cuckoo? I had a long list of clocks. Tower clocks and alarm clocks and mantel clocks and many more. I actually didn’t choose cuckoo for its alliteration. I chose it because it is fun to say. The addition of rhyme for this book came after the idea, after the loose use of repetition, and after the list of things a crane can pick up. I decided to layer it with rhyme after a straight prose approach didn’t seem playful enough to me.

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Rhyme can engage the young child like nothing else. But the rhyme must be good, natural, easy. Never forced. What is forced rhyme? Many writers ask that. The answer is simple. An end rhyme must complete the thought the way you want it to, must express the idea you are truly trying to get across to the reader, not in a convoluted, these-two-words-rhyme, kind of way.

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The two picture books I highlighted here are as different as night and day. One is a lyrical, wondrous beauty of a picture story book. The other is a whimsical rhyming romp about a construction machine. Both are picture books, and both use poetic devices. One to tell a story, and the other to engage and entertain the child in a playful way.

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Children, and especially very young children, are enchanted by rhythm, rhyme and repetition. They almost feed off of predictable language patterns, being entranced by the sound of the words, the cadence of the line, and the delicious knowledge that they are exactly sure what’s coming next. Being able to chime in to jump rope and nursery rhymes, song lyrics, prayers and cheers has always been, and will always be, one of life’s purest joys. Lines from picture books do this too, and can they ever. From the youngest babe to the elderly grandfather, who doesn’t love to repeat the words to a poem or song they know, or once knew, or will forever know in the vault of their heart.

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Bio:
Rebecca Kai Dotlich grew up in the Midwest exploring trails by the creek, reading comic books, making paper dolls and building snowmen. She is a children’s poet and picture book author of titles such as Bella and Bean (an SCBWI Golden Kite Honor) and What Is Science? (Subaru SB&F finalist and Bank Street’s Best Book of the year.) She gives poetry workshops, visits classrooms across the country, and speaks at conferences, retreats, libraries and schools to teachers, aspiring writers and students of all ages. Her books have received the Gold Oppenheim Toy Portfolio Award as well as an IRA Children’s Choice and her work has been featured on Reading Rainbow and the PBS children’s show Between the Lions. She is the grandmother of four. Rebecca still reads comic books and builds snowmen. WHAT CAN A CRANE PICK UP? (Illustrated by Mike Lowery) received a *starred* review from Publisher’s Weekly. Following WHAT CAN A CRANE PICK UP? is ALL ABOARD! forthcoming in fall 2014.

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Please enjoy this book trailer for What Can a Crane Pick Up?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MkNoQ6TcVDs

 

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 Thank you Rebecca Kai Dotlich!

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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Wednesday April 2nd

By Angie Karcher © 2014

Lesson 4

 

First of all, this is a VERY long post so please don’t get overwhelmed…The rest of the posts will not all be nearly this long. I wanted to share the lyrics of several songs and that made it very long!

 

 Ballad

Folk ballads are the oldest type of poetry known. Traveling storytellers would often set stories to music, thus the ballad was born. Many older ballads are by anonymous authors as they were not written down but passed verbally from person to person. For this reason, there were many versions of the same story as each storyteller gave the story their own personal touches. Most ballads were about bravery, love, death and dark, depressing subjects.

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There are certain distinctive features that make up a ballad. It typically describes a dramatic event, has lots of action, but told in a simple way. Ballads were written by the working man for the working man to commiserate their difficult lives as laborers and hard-working folks. I found this ballad written by my favorite storyteller, James Taylor.

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This ballad, Millworker, is from a book titled WORKING by author Studs Terkel that was later made into a Broadway show. James Taylor wrote and performs this song titled Millworker.

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Studs Terkel

 

The Lyrics to Millworker by James Tylor

http://www.lyricsfreak.com/j/james+taylor/millworker_20069194.html

James Taylor

Mr. James Taylor 

My favorite storyteller! If you ever get a chance to see him in concert…Do it!

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Here is a Youtube Link to Millworker by James Taylor

http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=vg2D714gn2w

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Often a ballad has a repeating refrain.

 

A Ballad is …a narrative poem, often of folk origin and intended to be sung, consisting of simple stanzas and usually having a refrain. (Write this down)

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Now that you are really depressed after reading about the “Millworker,” I’ll share a few ballads that are a bit more uplifting. Yankee Doodle is one such ballad. We sang it as kids and teach it to kids today but even Yankee Doodle has a dark side.

I highlighted the lyrics in hot pink because it was written and sung by British troops in the mid 1700’s to taunt and make fun of Colonial troops about how femininely they dressed. The British thought that the Colonial soldiers were foolish, uneducated, unsophisticated men that spent too much time watching horse racing and socializing. Their clothing and floppy, feathered hats gained them the name “Macaronis” and was the source of teasing that inspired this “not-so-nice” ballad. Who knew?

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Yankee Doodle

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Yankee Doodle Lyrics Author Unknown

A       Yankee Doodle went to town

B      A-riding on a pony,

C       Stuck a feather in his cap

B       And called it macaroni.

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         Chorus:

A       Yankee Doodle keep it up,    

B       Yankee Doodle dandy,

C      Mind the music and the step,

B       And with the girls be handy.

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A       Father and I went down to camp,

B       Along with Captain Gooding,

C       And there we saw the men and boys

B       As thick as hasty pudding.

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      Chorus

A       There was Captain Washington,

B       Upon a slapping stallion,

C       Giving orders to his men-

B       I guess there were a million.

Rhyme Scheme is the pattern of rhymes used in a poem, usually marked by letters to symbolize corresponding ending sounds. (write this down)

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Yankee Doodle is written in a common ABCB Rhyme Scheme. This means that each line gets a letter that correlate with the ending words that rhyme to determine the rhyme scheme. If the ending words rhyme, those lines are given the same letter.

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A-Town

B-Pony

C-Cap

B-Macaroni

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These are the ending words in each line. Town doesn’t rhyme with anything so it gets the letter A by itself.

Pony and Macaroni rhyme so they both get the letter B

Cap doesn’t rhyme with anything so it gets the letter C by itself.

This rhyme scheme is ABCB.

Throughout the rest of the poem each stanza follows this scheme.

Yankee Doodle is written in 4-line stanzas.

A Stanza is a Rhyming pattern that forms a group (write this down)

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Another ballad you probably know is Clementine. This seems an obvious sad story written during the 1849 Gold Rush about a miner and his daughter. It is actually a humorous ballad written in a tongue-in-cheek style, making fun of the typical drama that accompanies most ballads. For example, Clementine’s feet are so big she has to wear boxes for shoes. Clementine managed to get a splinter in her toe and drown as her father didn’t know how to swim. So Clementine is a humorous, tragic ballad.

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Clementine Lyrics Author unknown

A       In a cavern, in a canyon,

B       Excavating for a mine

C       Dwelt a miner forty niner,

B       And his daughter Clementine

                  Chorus

A       Oh my darling, oh my darling,

B       Oh my darling, Clementine!

C       Thou art lost and gone forever

B       Dreadful sorry, Clementine

 

A       Light she was and like a fairy,

B       And her shoes were number nine

C       Herring boxes, without topses,

B       Sandals were for Clementine.

Chorus

A       Drove she ducklings to the water

B       Ev’ry morning just at nine,

C       Hit her foot against a splinter,

B       Fell into the foaming brine.

Chorus

A       Ruby lips above the water,

B       Blowing bubbles, soft and fine,

C       But, alas, I was no swimmer,

B       So I lost my Clementine.

Chorus

A       In a churchyard on a hillside

B       Where the flowers grow and twine

C       There grow roses amongst the posies

B       Flowers for my Clementine.

Chorus

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A Youtube Video of Clementine by Lew Dite on his Ukelele

http://www.youtube.com/watch?list=RDRUzQy4mmT3Q&v=RUzQy4mmT3Q&feature=player_detailpage

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Some Ballad Resources:

http://www.mahalo.com/how-to-write-a-ballad-poem/

http://www.creative-writing-now.com/how-to-write-poetry.html

http://www.kirstymurray.com/mktblues/wrtpen/Ballads.gif

 

 

So why do we need to know about ballads? Because…they are easy to remember because of their rhyme and rhythm. Remember yesterday when we talked about how rhyme helps kids to remember words and parts of language? Well, when you sing a poem, a ballad, it helps you to remember the words. Music is a clue that helps us remember the words to the poem, or song.

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Plus, ballads are one of the earliest and most basic forms of storytelling. That is what we do. We are storytellers and can certainly learn from those who used music to capture their audience. Plus, Yankee Doodle was written in the 1700’s and Clementine in 1849. I hope someday a story I write is remembered, recited and discussed by writers 150 – 200 years from now!

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Cinquain [sing-keyn]

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A Cinquain is a stanza with five lines and each line has a required number of syllables.

2-4-6-8-2 syllables (Write this down)

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So, you may be wondering why I have plopped cinquains down so early in this process of learning about poetry? Ballads were a pretty straight forward concept and easy to understand their origin and why they are still enjoyed today.

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It’s time to get out of your comfort zone! We are going to jump right into the icy water with our clothes on! 1-2-3…JUMP!

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It’s because I want you to start really evaluating every word when you read a poem. Look for patterns, rhythms, syllables, rhymes, meanings, etc. The word cinquain sounds intimidating, as will many of the other words we learn. But, that doesn’t mean the concepts are hard…just new.

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It was developed by Adelaide Crapsey who probably borrowed the idea from Haiku. It is not difficult once you first, know what it is and second, know how to write one. Writing a cinquain is about following the rules. In fact writing poetry and rhyme is all about following the rules. All we have to do is learn the rules, write them down, glue them into our brain and then…follow them.

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The key to understanding a traditional cinquain is finding the syllable count. The beats-per-line is the syllable count. Clap your hands every time you hear a different vowel sound (A-E-I-O-U) of a word.

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Examples:

1 syllable    (Dog)

2 syllables   (Kit—ten)

3 syllables   (Cu—cum—ber)

4 syllables   (Wa—ter—me—lon)

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When counting the syllables in a line, you can count syllables in multiple words. For example: Upon a starry night

6 Syllables  (Up—on—a—star—ry—night)

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The rules of a cinquain are about the syllable count allowed in each line.

line 1 – 2 syllables

line 2 – 4 syllables

line 3 – 6 syllables

line 4 – 8 syllables

line 5 – 2 syllables

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Here is an example of a well-known cinquain.

November Night

By Adelaide Crapsey

2        Listen…

4        With faint dry sound

6        Like steps of passing ghosts,

8        the leaves, frost-crisp’d, break from the trees

2        And fall.

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Notice these lines don’t rhyme. Remember when I said earlier that rhyme is really a small part of writing poetry? Well, now we are diving into the chilly water of BOM, BOM, BOM…THE NON-RHYMING ZONE!

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I want you to stop thinking about rhyme for a while and completely focus on everything else about the language. Read, hear, see, smell, taste and touch the words used. We will get to the rhyme later but for now, trust me and just follow the rules.

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Here is my first attempt at writing a traditional cinquain.

2        Sleeping.

4        My eyes are shut,

6        My brain won’t go to sleep.

8        The story doesn’t want to keep.

2        I’m up!

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Here’s Another

2        Lucy,

4        A dachshund kiss.

6        Her wagging tail, a smile,

8        Tilted head with begging banter.

2        A treat!

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This wasn’t as easy as I thought it would be, but it was fun! There are many, many other more contemporary forms of cinquains that are written by many poets today. They have very strict rules and can get complicated quickly but if you follow the rules, one line at a time, you can do it! I found that the examples given were a huge help. To me, this is like doing a word search or a crossword puzzle. I love the challenge!

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Contemporary Cinquain

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Contemporary Cinquain Rules:

Use the same rules about syllables as for traditional but add the rules on the left as well.

 

One word title                                                                                 2 syllables

2 adjectives that describe the topic                                           4 syllables

3 words that express action                                                         6 syllables

4 words that express a feeling                                                     8 syllables

1 word that refers to the title                                                       2 syllables

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My first attempt at a contemporary cinquain:

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Summer

Heated, desired

Melting winter sorrow

Gentle yearning for the morning

Sunshine                                                                        22 Syllables

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Another example:

FRIENDSHIP

Friend/ship

Pre/cious, awe/some

Bright/ens gloom/y mo/ments

Rain/bow’s treas/ure trove dis/cov/ered

Al/ways

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Some Cinquain Resources :

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/lessons/how-to-write-a-cinquain-poem/

http://ettcweb.lr.k12.nj.us/forms/cinquain.htm

http://hrsbstaff.ednet.ns.ca/davidc/6c_files/Poem%20pics/cinquaindescrip.htm

 

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As I read over this post, I hope I’m not over explaining. Remember, I’m a kindergarten teacher by trade, and I’m used to working with 5 year olds. I apologize if anything sounds condescending or too simplified. As we have writers here of all experiences and abilities my hope is to keep things as simple as possible. Also, each blog post will hopefully stand alone as a lesson so if I repeat words or concepts that is the reason…plus repetition may help us remember better.

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I know this was a long post but we had a lot to cover and hopefully, the examples help to explain. We are still alive after jumping into the frozen waters of poetry but even though we might be shivering and shaky, we will live to see another poem. Stay warm! Spring is here…right!?

                                                                                                                  ~Angie

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Writing Prompts:

Write a short ballad about participating in RhyPiBoMo. Oh…the sorrow!

Write a Traditional Cinquain

And if you are feeling really brave write a Contemporary Cinquain

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Okay, now do everything else on the pledge for today and don’t forget to comment on today’s blog post!

 RhyPiBoMo Pledge

Please comment ONLY ONE TIME below for a chance to win today’s prize!

Prizes will be drawn by Random.com next Sunday for the previous week.

To be eligible for a prize you must be a registered participant and
comment after each days lessons.

 

 

No Foolin’ Around! Let’s Write Rhyming Picture Books!

Welcome to Tuesday’s post!

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I’m afraid to even say it out loud but

“Everything seems to be running smoothly…”

I say while knocking on my wooden desk!

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Our Facebook critique groups are signed up and submissions for this week have begun.  We continue to grow daily in numbers of those registering and those requesting to join the Facebook group. We have over 150 people registered as of last night!

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Please check out the Facebook Group as we have a wonderful group of generous members who are sharing lots and lots of resources that aren’t listed on this blog. I want to also say welcome to several of our guest bloggers who have joined the group. Thank you SO much for your support of RhyPiBoMo!

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Before we get going today, I want to say thank you to my friend Gayle Wing O’Donnell, a very talented artist and friend who created the logo for this event. I held a small contest last November and she won the opportunity to create the logo with her lovely parchment background and Willy S. boldly proclaiming “The rhyme’s the thing wherein we speak the words and let them sing”

Thank you so much Gayle!

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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s

Golden Quill Guest Blogger

Corey Rosen Schwartz

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Rhypibomo Guest Blogger Badge                 Corey R Schwartz 1

Primed for Rhyme

I used to think that there were two types of books: plot-driven and character driven. Then, I met Simone Kaplan at an SCBWI conference and was told that my manuscripts actually fall into a third category: language-driven.

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I love words.

Big words.

BOLD WORDS.

Swirly words.

STOUT words.

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I am much better at stringing together a lovely lyrical line of words than I am at creating a quirky character or compelling plot.

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Sometimes my writing partner will say to me, “Maybe we should write this PB in prose?” And my response is always, “And maybe Derek Jeter should play for the Jets?”
Rhyme is what I do best. Why would I abandon the best weapon in my arsenal?
Here’s how you know you should be a rhymer.

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Do you adore alliteration?
Inside a cramped and crowded coop,
a busy brood was packing.
Folding, cramming, suitcase-jamming,
sorting, stuffing, stacking.
Repeat consonant sounds to tickle the tongue.

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Do you worship word play?
He scrambled up the window blinds
he nibble-nipped the seats.
he dangled from the chandeliers
and swiss-cheesed Sherlock’s sheets.

Mouse with Cheese

 Play with parts of speech to stretch the imagination.
As night approached, his comic heroes
set his thoughts a-tickin’.
“Batgoose wouldn’t duck and hide.
I’m small, but I’m no chicken!”

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Play with puns to add some fun.

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Does gibberish make you squibberish?
One blustery, gustery,
dustery day,
a hippo named Grace
gazed out at the gray.
There are 988, 968 in the English language. But why let that hold you back? If you find that there is a gap in the lexicon, fill it in yourself!
Sprinkle in some gibberish to make your story stand out.

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If you answered “yes” to these questions, then your

mind may be primed for rhyme

So, cherish that talent and run with it.

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Bio:
Corey Rosen Schwartz is the author of The Three Ninja Pigs, Goldi Rocks & The Three Bears and the forthcoming Ninja Red Riding Hood. Her singing is extremely pitchy, but she does hold Family Idol and X Factor events in her living room.

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Some of Corey’s awesome books:

 

Corey R Schwartz 2                 Ninja Red Riding Hood

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HOP! PLOP! (Walker, 2006)
THE THREE NINJA PIGS (Putnam, 2012)
GOLDI ROCKS & THE THREE BEARS (Putnam, Feb 2014)
NINJA RED RIDING HOOD (Putnam, July 2014)

WHAT ABOUT MOOSE? (Atheneum, 2015)


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Website: http://www.coreyrosenschwartz.com
Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/CoreyPBNinja

Twitter: @coreypbninja


 

Thank you Corey Rosen Schwartz!

 

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 RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Tuesday April 1st

By Angie Karcher © 2014

Lesson 3

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Why Do You Write in Rhyme?

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You created a list on Sunday of why you write in rhyme. It is very important that you think about this question! Many of you have been told like I have that rhyme is hard to publish. Many editors don’t accept rhyme. Don’t write in rhyme. Yet, we are all here, together, with this wonderful group of hard-headed people who are fighting for our rhyme! I am very passionate about this subject. I guess you are too.

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Psssss….When an editor says they don’t accept submissions in rhyme…many times that is code for we don’t publish stinky rhyme! Not always, but often, that is the case.

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They have legitimate reasons for being hesitant about rhyme. It is difficult to do well and they are INUNDATED with terrible, horrible, no good, very bad rhyme! It is difficult to sell internationally as it doesn’t translate as a book in prose does.
But…when an editor who doesn’t accept rhyme comes across a sparkling manuscript, glowing with brilliant rhyme and singing, poetic stanzas with a rainbow arc of hook, line and sinker…he/she tears up, bites the hook and then publishes it right away!
So what do we do? Decide if we are passionate enough to do it right. To type until our fingers bleed the good stuff that rhyme offers. Are you dedicated to this really difficult path to publication? Why do you write in rhyme?

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I write in rhyme because:
It’s fun to write.
It’s fun to read.
It’s challenging, like doing a crossword puzzle.
It’s such a great feeling when you find that gem of a word that says exactly what you want to say…and it rhymes in the perfect spot.
Kids love to read and listen to a rhyming story.
I can use silly, word play to make the words visual and entertaining to the ears.
I grew up reading Dr. Seuss books and fell in love
I like writing humorous poetry and when it rhymes, it adds to the humor.
It seems innately natural for my brain to lean towards rhyme.
Rhyme is very beneficial for kids in many ways.

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As a former kindergarten teacher and developmental therapist, I know the importance of rhyme. Children should be introduced to rhyme at an early age as it helps them develop an ear for oral language.

 

 Balloons

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1) First of all, rhyme is just plain fun! Kids enjoy filling in the rhyming words at the end of a sentence when prompted. The book becomes a game of sorts. Young children are so limited in their attention span, so reading rhyming books becomes play. Disguising learning as play is the golden ticket to teaching young children. Kids will stay engaged longer and interact more with a rhyming book because it grabs their attention and draws them in until the very last rhyming word is read.

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2) Rhyme helps them learn because it is easier to remember. Rhyme allows two words to form a bond, to connect as a pair with similar sounds. Each word is a clue as to what the other word is…throw in a few context clues from other words and you have a full-blown, rhyming mystery on your hands.

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Spider

For Example:

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The eensy-weensy spider ran up the water spout.

Down came the rain and washed the spider out.

Out came the sun and dried up all the rain,

And the eensy-weensy spider ran up the spout again.

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 Most young children wouldn’t normally know what a “spout” is but words like “water” and “rain” help define the meaning. These are context clues.

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Read this poem to children a few times and then begin to leave off the last word, allowing them to guess the word…
They will immediately remember the ending words because they remember the sound of the rhyming words. This teaches children how to predict words with similar sounds and helps them see and hear a pattern in language.

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Add in a few hand motions to go along with this poem and it gets even better because now they have visual clues to go along with the oral clues. It’s all about memory and helping children find joy in learning language…and they feel successful which encourages them to try again.

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This one little poem teaches rhyme, directions Up/DOWN, weather, size, word meanings, science of evaporation, science of water force, perseverance and more.

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It’s one poem, but in the world of teaching young children this poem is the beginning of learning about life around us and how early language skills affect all aspects of learning.

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Soapbox

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Boy…did I jump right on my kindergarten teacher soap box there, or what?

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3) Reading rhyme and singing songs with young children help them to learn about rhythm in language. We don’t speak in a monotone way when we communicate and we don’t read that way either. We are expressive in how we pronounce a word, how we stress one syllable more than another, how we pronounce a word differently than someone else and how we pause in certain spots. This is not something that we know when we are born. We learned all these things as a young child through poetry, songs and rhyming text. Children should hear it, so as they grow older, they can read it and then learn to write it.

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Rhyme is essential in the foundation of learning to read.

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Rhyme is essential in the foundation of learning to read.

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Rhyme is essential in the foundation of learning to read.

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I am a very passionate person and I know that together, children’s authors, agents and editors can make a difference in the reading skills of children today. The quality and quantity of children’s poetry books has dwindled greatly over the last 15-20 years.

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We must not give up when someone

tells us it won’t sell or that’s not the trend in literature today.

Poetry and rhyme has been the trend for children for hundreds of years! Where’s that soap box?

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And…did I say that Rhyme is essential in the foundation of learning to read? That’s pretty important!

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We NEED to continue writing quality rhyme!

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Seuss Poem Get Better

 

 

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Why Nursery Rhymes
http://www.dannyandkim.com/WhyNurseryRhymes.html

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Rhymers are Readers
http://www.kbyutv.org/kidsandfamily/readytolearn/file.axd?file=2011%2F3%2F2+Rhymers+are+Readers-Why+Important.pdf

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Rhyme with Reason
http://booksforkeeps.co.uk/issue/183/childrens-books/articles/other-articles/rhyme-with-reason-why-nursery-rhymes-matter

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The Importance of Rhyming in Learning to Read
http://learningdisabilities.about.com/od/readingstrategies/a/The-Importance-Of-Rhyming-In-Learning-To-Read.htm

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Why is Rhyming Important?
http://www.themeasuredmom.com/why-is-rhyming-important/

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Rhyming -Why is it Important?
http://fun-a-day.com/teaching-rhyming-part-1/

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The Benefit of Rhymes
http://www.bookstart.org.uk/professionals/about-bookstart-and-the-packs/research/reviews-and-resources/the-benefit-of-rhymes/

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April Poem

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Writing Prompts:

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Pull out your list of why you write in rhyme and revise it!
Write your own April Fool’s Day Poem

 

Okay, now do everything else on the pledge for today and don’t forget to comment on today’s blog post!

 RhyPiBoMo Pledge

Please comment ONLY ONE TIME below for a chance to win today’s prize!

Prizes will be drawn by Random.com next Sunday for the previous week.

To be eligible for a prize you must be a registered participant and
comment after each days lessons.