RhyPiBoMo 2015 Day 6 Julie Hedlund

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Julie Hedlund

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Today’s guest blogger is a very busy lady who I had the pleasure of meeting last summer at the L.A. SCBWI Conference. It was her 12 x 12 gathering I was heading to attend when some tricky stairs had another plan entirely. I am happy she is here to share her thoughts on figurative language.

Welcome Julie Hedlund!

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Fig Language


As I sat down to write this post about using figurative language in rhyming picture books, I came across this handy image from writeworld.org. When we think of figurative language, the first examples that come to mind are simile and metaphor, but those are just two of the tools in a whole shed full of others.

Rhyming picture books (and indeed all poetry) are such fertile ground for figurative language. Mix in the fact that anything can happen in a children’s book and you’ve got a recipe for making writing fun.

Let’s begin with the most familiar…


Similes and metaphors are often used to show strong, complicated emotions—such as love—that are difficult to express.

For example, the book I LOVE YOU AS MUCH by Lauri Krauss Melmud uses similes throughout.

Said the mother horse to her child, I love you as much as a warm summer breeze.
Said the mother bear to her child, I love you as much as the forest has trees.

I make use of metaphors in my own book, MY LOVE FOR YOU IS THE SUN.

My love for you is the sun.
Rising in your tender heart,
It shines on you when we’re apart.

My use of metaphor vs. simile was deliberate. Even the youngest child knows the sun is a constant, powerful force, gives us warmth, and comes up every day. By saying my love IS the sun, the reader gets a sense of its power.

Each verse of MY LOVE FOR YOU IS THE SUN also contains PERSONIFICATION. I’m giving human qualities to inanimate objects.

My love for you is a star.
Sparkling gemstone in the sky,
It keeps you under watchful eye.

Similes and metaphors aren’t only the domain of loving, quiet books, however. Debbie Diesen uses simile in the refrain of THE POUT-POUT FISH IN THE BIG-BIG DARK:

I’m fast as a sailfish,
I’m strong as a shark,
I’m smart as a dolphin …
But I’m scared of the dark.

Deb Lund makes use of simile, metaphor, AND invented words in ALL ABOARD THE DINOTRAIN:

The engine coughs and dinochugs.
The train moves like a line of slugs.
“We haven’t traveled very far.
Let’s dinopush each railroad car.”


One of the lovely tricks of verse is that idioms and clichés can be made fresh when they’re used to interrupt expectations and/or add humor. Corey Rosen Schwartz does this with great mastery in THE THREE NINJA PIGS:

For months, she’d persisted in earnest
Until she had paid all her dues.
How happy she felt
When she earned her last belt.
“I’ll make that wolf shake in his shoes.”

In another verse…

The wolf looked quite shaken,
But hollered, “Yo, Bacon.
I’m not at all scared of your tricks.”

In this case, Bacon becomes a hilarious symbol for the pig, and also plays on the fact that pigs symbolize food to the wolf.


Phrases that exaggerate to make a point can also be used to great effect in rhyming books. Sudipta Bardhan-Quallen uses this technique in HAMPIRE.

As Duck raced Red to Pony’s stall,
They heard the Hampire screaming.
“I’m starved, of course—
I’d eat a horse!”
His pointy fangs were gleaming.

What makes this verse even funnier (and creepier too) is that there is an actual horse in the story, so it’s a double play on words with a dash of mystery. Is this a figure of speech, or does he really want to eat the horse?

It’s true that rhyming well requires a great deal of work—proper use of meter and scansion, not falling into the traps of easy rhyme and inverted sentence structures, etc.

Figurative language gives you the chance to take a break from the mechanics and step inside a sandbox to construct castles from words. Allow yourself to play with your words and language, and your writing will be the richer.



About Julie:

Julie is a monthly contributor on author/illustrator Katie Davis’ Brain Burps About Books children’s literature podcast, a PAL member of SCBWI, and a contributing editor on the subject of 21st Century Publishing for Children’s Book Insider.

Julie Hedlund is an award-winning children’s book author, founder of the 12 x 12 Picture Book Writing Challenge, blogger, and a regular speaker at SCBWI and other industry events.

Her picture book, A TROOP IS A GROUP OF MONKEYS, Little Bahalia Publishing, 2013, first published as an interactive storybook app, was the recipient of the 2014 Independent Book Publisher’s Association Benjamin Franklin Digital Gold Award. Her storybook app, A SHIVER OF SHARKS, Little Bahalia Publishing, 2013, was a 2014 Digital Book Award winner. Her next book, MY LOVE FOR YOU IS THE SUN, released in September 2014 from Little Bahalia.


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RhyPiBoMo 2015 Optional Writing Prompt:6

This is NOT part of the pledge. It is an option for a writing exercise for those interested. You will not publically share this as part of RhyPiBoMo but may keep a journal of your writing this month for your own review.

Today’s writing prompt is to write a poem using at least 2 of the figurative language choices above.*

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Rhyming Critique Groups

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We have several groups still going strong from last year!

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The RhyPiBoMo 2015 Barnes and Noble BookFair is this Saturday, April 11th!

I have been asked to give a talk at my local Barnes and Noble in Evansville, Indiana on Maya Angelou during Educator’s Week. I combined my talk to include tidbits about Maya’s life and poetry with diversity in children’s books. What a wonderful opportunity to discuss poetry and diversity all in one talk! Thus, Barnes and Noble agreed to offer a BookFair all day on April 11th and 20% of all the sales that day will go to WE NEED DIVERSE BOOKS for all who use this coupon. It is good for sales in store and on-line so PLEASE support this worthy non-profit and buy lots and lots of books! Pass out coupons to friends and family too! Let’s support poetry and diversity in children’s books!

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132 thoughts on “RhyPiBoMo 2015 Day 6 Julie Hedlund

  1. As always, Julie, you created a masterful post with helpful, concise examples to help us use more figurative language in our picture books. Thank you for the guideposts. Maria Marshall

  2. Julie, Thank you for the figurative language review.An important part of poetry and prose, it gives such a luster to our writing. – Judy Rubin

  3. Loved this lesson. All these blogs are great sharpeners. Can we compile them in a printable form so we can create little educational books out of them?

  4. Elaine Hillson – Great examples Julie. Thank you for sharing your insight into using figurative language. Another post for me to put on my reference list.

  5. Linda Schueler: I love this: “Figurative language gives you the chance to take a break from the mechanics and step inside a sandbox to construct castles from words.” I’m going to go and play.

  6. Ginger Weddle
    Julie, Thanks for the clear and concise descriptions of figurative language. I love the “handy image” from writeworld.org. Great post!

  7. Rita Allmon– Hi, Julie. I enjoyed this wonderful post regarding figurative language. Thanks for leading us to the sandbox for our future word castles.

  8. Julie, this figurative language post was a fantastic reminder for me! Now to write a poem with some figurative language—it’s going to double as an exercise and a last minute birthday present for my husband 🙂

  9. Manju Howard: Julie, thanks for giving examples of figurative language terms. I read Corey Rosen Schwartz’s THE THREE NINJA PIGS during ReFoReMo. I love the lines –
    The wolf looked quite shaken,
    But hollered, “Yo, Bacon.

  10. The reminder to play with words and language even as we manage the details of poetry and lyrical prose by working through the mechanics is important. Thanks, Julie. Val McCammon

  11. I’ll dust my brain off cobwebs and refresh my mind on some of these literature terms 🙂 also the bookmark is a good find, thank you.

  12. Mandy Yates

    Great examples. That line from Corey’s book was always one of my favorites!

    The wolf looked quite shaken,
    But hollered, “Yo, Bacon.
    I’m not at all scared of your tricks.”


  13. Tanja Bauerle –
    Thank you Julie, for your great post and wonderful examples. I especially love the graphic you found explaining the various figurative language tools. It is now printed out and hanging on my message board on my desk for quick reference. 🙂 Hugs.T

  14. Natasha Garnett
    Julie, thanks for the excellent refresher on figurative language. The examples were the greatest thing since sliced bread.

  15. Melanie Ellsworth – Thank you, Julie, for the figurative language chart and the examples to go with each area! Good refresher.

  16. Kathy Mazurowski
    I have a new favorite image: step inside a sandbox to construct castles from words. Thanks you!

  17. Thanks, Julie! It’s a great reminder for us to move beyond simile and metaphor in our figurative language.

  18. Lynn Alpert – Thanks Julie.
    She’s smart as a whip,
    And wise like an owl.
    She gives great advice
    Oh, what a doll!

    • Thanks for your comments, Mona and Rosemary! The terms ARE hard to keep straight sometimes, but many times we use these tools instinctively. So no need to memorize the names. 😉

  19. Kristi Veitenheimer – Thanks for the post. I always appreciate it when concrete examples go along with the lesson items! And I thoroughly enjoyed your course, Julie, The Lyrical Language Lab! I highly recommend it to everyone.

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