RhyPiBoMo 2015 Day 10
Today’s guest blogger is a librarian, a national speaker on literacy, an author and is married to a well-known and very talented illustrator. She has all her literary bases covered! I have been virtual friends with her for a long time and hopefully someday soon we will connect in person as we only live one state apart. I am so excited about her debut rhyming picture book, GROUNDHOG’S DILEMMA, coming out in December.
It is my pleasure to introduce
Alliteration Adds Allure!
by Kristen Remenar
Why do we say “Roses are red, violets are blue, sugar is sweet and so are you?” Apples are red. Honey is sweet, and so is candy, but substituting these words into the poem, even though the syllables fit, doesn’t work as well. The alliteration of “roses are red” and “sugar is sweet” adds something interesting to the rhyme. The rule “always avoid alliteration” does not apply to poetry for children. Playful alliteration and repetition of certain sounds can add another level of delight to a rhyming book. Study these masters to see how it’s done:
from Go, Go, Grapes! A Fruit Chant by April Pulley Sayre:
Take your pick.
Yell for yumminess:
Kiwis – quick!”
from Chicken Soup with Rice: A Book of Months by Maurice Sendak:
it’s so nice
on the sliding ice
to sip hot chicken soup
sipping chicken soup
from The Piggy in the Puddle by Charlotte Pomerantz:
“See the piggy,
See the puddle,
See the muddy little puddle.
See the piggy in the middle
Of the muddy little puddle.
See her dawdle, see her diddle
In the muddy, muddy middle.
See her waddle, plump and little,
In the very merry middle.”
from Bubble Trouble by Margaret Mahy:
“Little Mabel blew a bubble, and it cause a lot of trouble…
Such a lot of bubble trouble in a bibble-bobble way.
For it broke away from Mabel as it bobbed across the table,
where it bobbled over Baby, and it wafted him away.”
from Bubble Gum, Bubble Gum by Lisa Wheeler:
Chewy-gooey bubble gum,
Icky-sticky bubble gum
Melting in the road.
Along comes a toad…
A fine, fat toad,
A fine, fat, wild
Kristen Remenar is a children’s librarian, author, teacher, and a national speaker on literacy for the Bureau of Education & Research. Her first picture book, GROUNDHOG’S DILEMMA, will be published by Charlesbridge in December 2015, and is illustrated by Matt Faulkner, award-winning author/illustrator and dearly loved husband of Kristen Remenar. The FaulkneRemenars live in Michigan.
Pre-Order it here!
RhyPiBoMo 2015 Optional Writing Prompt: 10
This is NOT part of the pledge. It is an option for a writing exercise for those interested. You will not publically share this as part of RhyPiBoMo but may keep a journal of your writing this month for your own review.
Today’s writing prompt is to write a mushy, rhyming, love poem with as much alliteration as you can muster!
Alliteration is a poetic technique in which a number of words, having the same first consonant sound and occur close together. Be silly with it and give an exaggerated effort to make this more fun!
When I sit and softly swoon
I gaze up gawking, like a goon.
I sing “sweet nothings” passion tune
to my gleaming Mr. Marigold Moon…he’ll blossom here real soon!
© 2015 Angie Karcher
Silly fun but you get the idea!
Maya Angelou Webinar Poetry Contest
(Only for those who attended the webinar last Saturday night.)
Those who attended the Maya Angelou celebration webinar last week were invite to submit a poem about civil rights today. Jackie Wellington generously offered to donate a copy of Maya Angelou’s POETRY FOR YOUNG PEOPLE
After much deliberation our esteemed judges Pam Courtney, Natalie Davis Miller and Charles Waters determined
the winner is…
Here is Dawn’s poem and two others written for the contest
by Ann Magee and Bev Langill.
If everyone just understood…
By Dawn Young
It blows my mind, it bothers me
when I see things I often see.
Ruthless people acting cruel,
forsaking our most golden rule.
Sprouting hate with roots in race,
blooming doom that buds disgrace.
Ignorance, so cold and callous
molding blind and mindless malice.
Have a heart. Before you start
to slice and dice and tear apart
someone with a different view,
Think…How’d you like that done to you?
If everyone just understood,
how that feels then no one would
do these things I often see,
these things that really bother me.
Revolution of LOVE Needed
by Bev Langill
War, intolerance, hate,
Boko Haram, Al Shabaab, Feguson, Indiana ,
Killing, raping, beheading, bombing
Forcing their religion, their beliefs
On people different from them,
Whether by religion, colour or sexual orientation.
Yet, no one is better than anyone else
No one has the right to push their own agenda.
Love thy neighbour as themselves
What a radical belief
As powerful now as 2000 years ago
A message repeated in all major religions
Love over hate.
A revolution is needed
Not of war, but of LOVE
Not of killing, but of embracing
Creating a world where all thrive and are loved and accepted.
NAMES AND NUMBERS
a civil rights poem
By Ann Magee
Did Michael Brown know 100 years before his Mama gave him his name,
Judge Ferguson placed blame on Mr. Plessy for his blackness?
Did Michael Brown know 58 years later, another black man named Brown stood tall,
anchored to the ground like an ancient apple tree so his daughter could gather
the fruit of knowledge?
Did Michael Brown know 60 years later he would graduate high school,
and 8 days later he’d be shot 12 times at 12 o’clock noon,
90 seconds after he encountered police in Ferguson, Missouri?
We didn’t know either.
But we should have.
How many train cars, water fountains, chairs at the café counter,
blocks walked to school, seats on the bus, and steps marched in protest
do we need to count?
How many times will we let history repeat itself?
to all our judges for your time and support of RhyPiBoMo 2015!
Thanks also to all who came to the webinar to celebrate a great woman and to those who sent in poems for the contest. It was an impromptu opportunity and had a short turnover time but I appreciate your thoughtful words. Maybe, you can use your poem in a way that will do good in the world…Maya would like that!
Golden Quill Poetry Contest
The Golden Quill Poetry Contest will accept entries STARTING April 13th and the deadline is April 25th midnight Central Time.
PLEASE make sure you read the contest rules and follow them exactly. Unfortunately, due to the number of poems we will receive, a poem will be disqualified if it does not follow the guidelines exactly. This is only fair to those who did follow the rules and is good practice for us as writers because editors expect those guidelines to be followed to the letter.
144 thoughts on “RhyPiBoMo 2015 Day 10 Kristen Remenar”
Shirley Johnson – Great examples! Enjoyed the post.
Thanks so much, Shirley! I’m glad you found it beneficial!
Patricia Corcoran – I’ve always loved alliteration and find that my poems tend to have lots of examples of alliteration. Thank you for the post and congratulations on your forthcoming book!
Thanks, Patricia! Yes, I’ve always adored alliteration as well, even though I’ve heard the rule “always avoid alliteration.” 😉
Julia Maisen – Fun examples.
I’m writing a fun alliteration poem. Thanks for the writing prompt and thanks for the informative article on alliteration in poetry for children.
Zainab, I’m glad your poetry includes alliteration. I think kids especially enjoy when language is playful.
Fantastic examples to learn from. Thank you
You’re very welcome, Clark!
Comment from Cynthia Cheng: I’m fine with good alliteration, even if it’s in poetry for adults.
Cynthia, I agree, alliteration isn’t just a playful poetry ploy for kids. I think of Whitman’s “Song of Myself”: I celebrate myself, and sing myself,/ And what I assume you shall assume/ For every atom belonging to me as good belongs to you.
The alliteration adds a layer of loveliness.
Rebecca Trembula – Alliteration is one of my favorites. Love the fruit chant!
Rebecca, If you loved “Go, Go, Grapes!” by April Pulley Sayre, you’ll also enjoy her books “Rah, Rah, Radishes!” and “Let’s Go Nuts!”
-Thank you Kristen! I love alliteration. Great examples.
You’re very welcome, Aimee!
Maria Bostian: Oh my! So much packed into one post. WOW!
First off – Kristen, that you for the post. I love alliteration and it was fun to read. You gave us some great examples.
To Dawn, Ann, and Bev – What beautiful poetry! I hope you’ll take those poems and share them with the world. All three have messages that we need to hear!
Maria, I’m glad you enjoyed the post. I’m so digging RhyPiBoMo!
Appreciations from Jan Annino for Angie Karcher & Kristen Remenar.
Kiddos are crazy for creatures from underneath & first up is that famed Februrary Famous Face, the groundhog. So a tip of the tophat for GROUNDHOG’s DILEMMA. Luv it that your hubby is acing the artful attitude in artwork. Will watch for this wonderful release. Kudos, Kristen!
Jan Annino, your alliterative answer to my poetry post made me gleefully grateful! I’m so stealing “February Famous Face” for my goofy groundhog guy!
Patricia Toht: Alliteration is so much fun to read aloud. Congrats on your upcoming book, Kristen! And kudos to Dawn Young for a terrific poem!
Thanks, Patricia! I’m glad you enjoyed the post, and I hope you like GROUNDHOG’S DILEMMA when it comes out!
Loved the alluring alliterative examples! Thanks for sharing them!
I’m proud you found the poetry post pleasing! Thanks, Rebecca!
What a fun post. I love the way the words roll and dance off my tongue!
Pat, I’m glad you enjoy the playful poetry, too!
Alliterations are always amazing. Thank you Kristen, for kindly sharing the knack of alliteration, as I acquire new knowledge.
Hip, hip, hooray for the winners of the Maya Angelou Webinar Poetry Contest: Dawn, Bev and Ann!
Salutations, Suzy! I’m thankful you thought the poetry post was pleasing!
Wonderful examples, Kristen! Thank you!! Can’t wait to see Groundhog’s Dilemma in December! Best wishes with it!!
Thanks so much, Kenda! Please let me know if you’d ever like copies of Groundhog’s Dilemma signed. I have an in with the illustrator. *ahem!*
Alliteration is so much fun. Thanks for great examples. Gail Cartee
Glad you enjoyed the post, Gail!
Great fun! Thanks, Kristen. –Peggy Archer
You’re very welcome, Peggy!
Now this is fun! Once you start with alliteration it is hard to stop . looking forward to Groundhogs Delema!
Jennifer, once you start getting silly with syllables, stopping takes such strength. (Sure this was a stretch, but it’s still such fun!) I hope you enjoy GROUNDHOG’S DILEMMA!
Nadine Cranenburgh: Great post, Kristen. I love alliteration, and Chicken Soup with Rice is one of my favourite poems. Have you heard the song version?
Nadine, I have very fond memories of singing “Chicken Soup with Rice” and “A Alligators All Around”, when Carole King made the “Really Rosie” collection with Maurice Sendak. Simply sublime!
I have always loved alliteration and always will! Thanks for the post.
I love alliteration and so do kids–thanks for these great examples, Kristen! And thanks to Angie for running the Maya poetry contest–Congrats Dawn!
Thanks Ann and your poem was amazing! 🙂
Alliteration is so much fun. Thanks for the examples. Congrats on your first book in December of this year! Danielle Hammelef
Thank you for the vote for alliteration! I’ve been hearing so much of the opposite lately and it needed to be balanced.
Karen Nordseth Roos
Susan Schade- Thank you Kristen!
I’m in the choir here. I love alliteration! Thank you for showing it off!