One week of poetry & rhyme down…4 to go!
I am tired but energized if that makes any sense! As I think I mentioned in one of the blogs, I am a night owl, HOOooo writes at night and sleeps during the day. It’s just how my brain functions best and with 4 kids, it is the only quiet time in the house. It works pretty well with our weekly schedule but weekends are difficult. I’m hoping I will find a few minutes today to actually read some picture books and do some of the writing prompts as I’ve been too busy writing future lessons and posting the daily blog posts. I’ve thoroughly enjoyed everyone’s comments and I wish I could reply to them all. Just know that I am reading every one of them and it warms my heart to hear that you are enjoying this as much as I am. I also appreciate the humor that makes me giggle. The poem with An – gee was priceless and I have read it several times…Even Helen Frost like that one!
Don’t forget the Rhyming Party tomorrow on Facebook at noon.(Central Time) We will play some silly games and only be able to comment in rhyme. It is hilarious good fun! If you want to join the RhyPiBoMo Facebook Group, please request to join several hours before the party because I won’t be able to add you immediately before the event.
Don’t forget to enter The Golden Quill Poetry Contest
Click the tab above that says “Golden Quill Poetry Contest” to enter. That is where you go to send your poem. There is no registration for this contest, just copy and paste your poem in the contact form and send it to me. There are quite a few rules as we are learning about poetry with all its rules, I didn’t want you to think I was being soft on you! I have received several poems already. Please make sure you follow ALL the directions, especially leaving your first and last name as well as a contact email address or phone number so i can contact you if you are one of the winners. Any poem that does not follow all the rules will be disqualified. AND…you may only enter one poem. Maybe next year we will have multiple categories but I needed to keep it simple this year. Good luck and may Willy S. be looking over your shoulder! For contest details: https://angiekarcher.wordpress.com/rhypibomo-golden-quill-poetry-contest/
Today’s guest blogger mentions in her post that she is “a writer who rhymes. No claim to being a poet.” There are many of us that can completely relate to that! I’m thrilled that she is here, not to defend herself, but to share her wisdom about writing rhyme…her work speaks for itself and needs no defending whatsoever!
So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s
Golden Quill Guest Blogger
Crunch, munch, caterpillars lunch…
Growing up I chanted nursery rhymes. I listened to a lot of broadway show tunes, because my mom was active in local theatre and every now and then she would be in a musical. My sister and I would learn the lyrics and would sing along with Mom. My dad listened to jazz and the blues and we sang along to that. So my background is made up of song lyrics. Lots of near rhyme, single syllable rhyme and rhythm. I feel rhythm is a big part of a good picture book text. Picture books are theatre—are meant to be read aloud.
When I started writing and illustrating picture books, I had only taken one workshop. A great 10 day workshop with Uri Schulevitz, Writing with Pictures, which introduced me to how to create a complete picture book. I remember him saying don’t write in rhyme, there is too much bad rhyme out there, and don’t use a lot of color because it will cancel itself out and end up being another form of B&W. Well, no worry, I hadn’t planned on writing BAD rhyme and color was my thing, so that surely didn’t apply to me. My first book was In The Tall, Tall Grass, written in rhyme, packed with color. It did exceptionally well. So I merrily went on rhyming and using lots of color.
Then FB came along and all these blog posts were written and come to find out that I was doing BAD things like one syllable rhyme and near rhyme, and that I did not know a lot of the terms I was supposed to know. Good lord, I was setting a very bad example! Then Angie Karcher posted about RhyPiBoMo. And I signed up, because someone needed to defend me. I am a writer who rhymes. No claim to being a poet.
Some of my books are rhyming. Others are not because they just wouldn’t work. Time To Sleep started as a rhyming text, but I had too much info to impart. I would have had to force rhyme. Instead, I used a refrain, “winter is on its way,” to tie the story together.
In The Tall, Tall Grass is a rhyming chant. The reader is watching creatures all around going about their lives: “Crunch, munch caterpillars lunch / Dart, dip,hummingbirds sip.”
Barnyard Banter is rollicking verse. A goose is running around chasing a butterfly. Everybody is where they should be except goose: “Cows in the pasture, moo, moo, mom, moo / Roosters in the barnyard, cock a doodle doo.” Where Once There Was A Wood is about an area of land that has been leveled for a housing development: “Where once there was a wood, a meadow and a creek / Where once the red fox rested and closed his eyes to sleep.” All three books are written in simple rhyme, but each one has a particular rhythm to evoke a particular mood.
It is hard to explain BAD RHYME to people. For some reason people seem to think if you are going to write for children you must rhyme. NO. They also think that if you have sentences that rhyme and you string them together with no real intent or purpose that works. NO. Nonsense rhyme. NO (leave that to those who know what they are doing).
If you have a manuscript written in rhyme, look at it honestly. Drop the rhyme, write it in prose—Does it make sense? Is it clearer? Were you forcing the rhyme?
My advice is to read a lot of poetry. There are some wonderful poets that write for children. Read collections. Get out those sticky notes and mark the poems you like. Analyze why you like those particular poets. Read adult poets. And when you read, read out loud. Read with expression. Enjoy yourself!
Denise Fleming is the award-winning author and illustrator of many well known children’s books including In the Tall, Tall Grass and In the Small, Small Pond, which received a Caldecott Honor and her most recent book Underground.
As a young girl, Denise used to spend hours in her father’s workshop cutting, gluing, carving and building things. Today, she spends many hours in her own workshop studio, cutting, gluing and creating her picture books. Denise’s unique papermaking technique Is a labor-intensive process that involves hauling buckets of water, mixing and dying cotton fiber pulp. She then pours pulp through hand-cut stencils to form her bold, textured Illustrations. Denise’s love of language is apparent in her writing which combines rhythm, rhyme and lots of verbs. Denise Fleming’s books get kids laughing and loving reading.
Denise is a graduate of Kendall College of Art and Design in Michigan. Along with her husband and daughter, Denise lives in Ohio. Her books are a family effort as together they review words, pictures and ideas for new books. For more information about Denise Fleming and her books, visit her online at http://www.denisefleming.com.
Thank you Denise Fleming!
RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Saturday, April 5th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
There are 3 basic genres of poetry: Lyrical, Narrative and Dramatic
Lyrical Voice is the voice of the poet coming through in the written poem.
(write this down)
A lyrical poem expresses the emotions and feelings of a poet. It is used to express a personal how the poem views the world around him/her and of personal experiences. The poet puts him or herself in the poem. Lyrical voice is the most common voice used by poets.
This is where we get the word lyrics – the words of songs – this associates poetry with music. It is derived from a musical instrument called the lyre that was used to accompany the reading of this type of poem. The lyrical poem was set to music.
A Lyre is a small, stringed, harp-like instrument played mostly in ancient Egypt, Israel and Greece.
This can most often be identified by the use of the words I, me, my, mine, we, our, ours, and us
Interestingly, poetry has changed over the years in many ways but one noticeable difference from original poetry is that today poetry is mostly read silently. Years ago, poetry was sung or read aloud in poetry readings or plays. It was a social experience enjoyed by many writers and non-writers of the day. Of course, poetry readings are held today but are not nearly the social gatherings as they once were.
Sadly, a written poem can be compared to the written, musical score of a song. The joy is in hearing the notes played by instruments as there is joy in hearing the words said out loud. This allows for expressiveness, dramatic accents, pacing, and much more.
I had never thought about how our culture today is missing out on this art form of poetry…the oral sharing of a poem and the music of language.
Narrative Voice is the poet telling the story through the written word. (write this down)
The narrative voice tells a story. These stories may be humorous, sad, nonsensical, epic, or as simple as a nursery rhyme. The narrator is the storyteller. The story may be complete fantasy or it may be true but the poet never puts him or herself in the narrative poem.
A narrative poem typically uses a simple meter, such as a couplet (2 line stanza) or a quatrain. (4 line stanza)
They usually have a simple rhyme scheme…
A narrative poem typically uses a light meter for a humorous poem and a more structured, rigid meter for a serious poem.
Sometimes they are written in free verse.
Free verse poetry is written without rhyme and doesn’t follow any poetic form. (write this down)
It is full of emotion that is expressed in alliteration, consonance, internal rhyme and/or repetition. There are really no rules but some poets create their own rules.
This is one of my all-time favorite poems so I had to post it!
Casey at the Bat by Ernest Lawrence
The outlook wasn’t brilliant for the Mudville Nine that day;
The score stood four to two, with but one inning more to play,
And then when Cooney died at first, and Barrows did the same,
A sickly silence fell upon the patrons of the game.
A straggling few got up to go in deep despair. The rest
Clung to that hope which springs eternal in the human breast;
They thought, if only Casey could get but a whack at that –
They’d put up even money, now, with Casey at the bat.
But Flynn preceded Casey, as did also Jimmy Blake,
And the former was a pudding and the latter was a fake;
So upon that stricken multitude grim melancholy sat,
For there seemed but little chance of Casey’s getting to the bat.
But Flynn let drive a single, to the wonderment of all,
And Blake, the much despised, tore the cover off the ball;
And when the dust had lifted, and the men saw what had occurred,
There was Jimmy safe at second and Flynn a-hugging third.
Then from 5,000 throats and more there rose a lusty yell;
It rumbled through the valley, it rattled in the dell;
It knocked upon the mountain and recoiled upon the flat,
For Casey, mighty Casey, was advancing to the bat.
There was ease in Casey’s manner as he stepped into his place;
There was pride in Casey’s bearing and a smile on Casey’s face.
And when, responding to the cheers, he lightly doffed his hat,
No stranger in the crowd could doubt ’twas Casey at the bat.
Ten thousand eyes were on him as he rubbed his hands with dirt;
Five thousand tongues applauded when he wiped them on his shirt.
Then while the writhing pitcher ground the ball into his hip,
Defiance gleamed in Casey’s eye, a sneer curled Casey’s lip.
And now the leather-covered sphere came hurtling through the air,
And Casey stood a-watching it in haughty grandeur there.
Close by the sturdy batsman the ball unheeded sped-
“That ain’t my style,” said Casey. “Strike one,” the umpire said.
From the benches, black with people, there went up a muffled roar,
Like the beating of the storm-waves on a stern and distant shore.
“Kill him! Kill the umpire!” shouted someone on the stand;
And it’s likely they’d a-killed him had not Casey raised his hand.
With a smile of Christian charity great Casey’s visage shone;
He stilled the rising tumult; he bade the game go on;
He signaled to the pitcher, and once more the spheroid flew;
But Casey still ignored it, and the umpire said, “Strike two.”
“Fraud!” cried the maddened thousands, and echo answered fraud;
But one scornful look from Casey and the audience was awed.
They saw his face grow stern and cold, they saw his muscles strain,
And they knew that Casey wouldn’t let that ball go by again.
The sneer is gone from Casey’s lip, his teeth are clenched in hate;
He pounds with cruel violence his bat upon the plate.
And now the pitcher holds the ball, and now he lets it go,
And now the air is shattered by the force of Casey’s blow.
Oh, somewhere in this favored land the sun is shining bright;
The band is playing somewhere, and somewhere hearts are light,
And somewhere men are laughing, and somewhere children shout;
But there is no joy in Mudville — mighty Casey has struck out.
Hey Diddle Diddle
Hey diddle diddle,
The cat and the fiddle,
The cow jumped over the moon.
The little dog laughed,
To see such sport,
And the dish ran away with the spoon
Old Mother Hubbard
Jabberwocky by Lewis Carroll
Sarah Cynthia Sylvia Stout Would Not Take the Garage Out by Shel Silverstein
Jimmy Jet and his TV Set by Shel Silverstein
Dramatic Voice has several forms…Apostrophe, The Mask and Conversation
Apostrophe is a dramatic voice where the poet talks to inanimate objects that cannot answer.
Who has the better right
To smell the first summer rose,
Bee – you or I?
O Captain! My Captain! by Walt Whitman
The Mask is when a poet pretends to be someone else and takes on their thoughts, their words, their life…This can be another person or an object.
Message From a Caterpillar by Lilian Moore
Don’t shake this bough.
Don’t try to wake me now.
In this cocoon I’ve work to do.
Inside this silk I’m changing things.
I’m worm-like now but in this dark I’m growing wings.
How to write a mask poem
Conversation is when two different voices talk back and forth to each other.
Often conversation poems are written in a way that you have to guess who is talking.
A more recent name for this seems to be a dialogue poem.
Sock and Shoe Speak
“Oh no!” said my sock,
“What a smell!
You need a bath, Mr. Shoe.
I can tell!”
“I’m leather,” said Shoe.
“I don’t smell.
Your dryer sheet stinks!
“I need a clothespin,”
said the sock.
“It’s the only way
we will walk.”
Shoe laughed and he smiled
“With no nose,
Sock, what will you do?
Hold your toes?”
I tugged on my shoe
“They’re so tight!
Would you both please
stop with this fight!”
There is a fourth genre of poetry called The Didactic form. A Didactic poem teaches a lesson or involves a moral dilemma. It is also considered instructional poetry meant to teach lessons on science, math, philosophy, etc.
Examples of Didactic poems:
Poems for Kids
Writing Prompt: Choose a genre of poetry and write a poem that fits into the rules for that genre.
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82 thoughts on “Saturday Schmaterday…Who’s up for Some Poetry and Picture Books?”
I like Denise Fleming’s rhyme attitude, or “rhattitude.” She did what felt right. She owned her verse.
Denise Fleming’s success shows us that there is such a wide range of rhyme, and we need to be aware of the forms but find our own rhyming voice.
awesome! thank you for this post!
Definitely there should be more readalouds of books and stories.
One week down, and we are still here! ❤️ Have decided I now need to edit all previous poems that I have written for kids, in order to stick to “perfect metrical rhythm” (even though I was so attached to the occasional double beat, I now realise that I may have needed to provide sheet music with them!)
It’s Saturday though, so I’m determined not to think in rhyme all day, in case my husband realises that I am indeed going batty! ❤️ YOU ARE DOING A GREAT JOB ANGIE, THANK YOU ❤️❤️
PS Sorry to ask, Angie, but I’m assuming that Cassey above is a Narrative Voice example (my browser sits it after the “free verse” title), and that there is a teeny typo – do Couplets / Quatrains have 2 /4 “line” stanza not “verse” stanza?
Enjoyed the lesson today! So much to learn!
thank you Denise Fleming and Angie Karcher for yet another terrific post. I must dust off my rusty narrative voice and see if i can get some words to sing.
I learned some new terms today…. “apostrophe” and “mask” forms of poetic voice. A teacher once told me that I write in poetic prose – using poetic techniques in my prose writings.
I really like Denise’s books. Thanks for having her post.
Angie and Denise, thanks for more great information!
I have long admired Denise’s work, and it is so nice to hear from her! Thanks for the lesson, Angie. A mask poem sounds like fun to try.
Looking forward to reading Denise’s books. Also really enjoyed the history behind lyrical voice–lyre and lyrics!
I just picked up In the Tall, Tall Grass yesterday and can’t wait to read it later today. Thanks, Denise, for your talk. We have our regional SCBWI conference today and I am a volunteer, so I won’t get to my homework until very late tonight, but I will get to study all this then. Thanks and have a rhymey time today.
Such good stuff – love Denise’s input, and SUCH fun learning about the different types of poetry. Wrote myself a mask from an ant’s perspective. Loads of fun! Thanks AGAIN for all this!
Thank You, Denise Fleming!!! Appreciate you sharing your insights and abvice!!
“Picture books are theatre – are meant to be read aloud.” Love this line, Denise. I am involved in theatre, and like you listened to a lot of lyrics growing up. Wonderful post! And Angie, you’re a rock star! Thanks for all that you are teaching us!
I enjoy Denise Fleming’s work and can definitely identify with being a writer who rhymes with no claims to being a poet! Thanks for sharing!
In the Tall, Tall, Grass was one of the books that I read over and over again when I was starting to write for kids. Love its brevity and its verbs!
Angie, Another day of rhyme. Your energy is amazing, our benefit wondrous. Thank you for sharing your expertise.
Thank you Angie!!! I am still struggling with some of the last days puzles so free pattern, just choose the poetry form today is a blessing!! Thank you!!! Enjoy the day!! 🙂
In the Tall, Tall Grass was a favorite of first graders! The color and rhyme were great writing prompts to get kids thinking more. Great book! Thanks for the breakdown of poetry genres.
I just copied this entire blog into a word document. I’ve decided that once RhyPiBoMo is over, I will go back into my document and study all the material again as I edit out the parts that I won’t need to improve my poetry. Thank you again, Angie, for all of this amazing material. Now off to write my conversation poem.
Another great lesson on poetry genres.I have enjoyed my first week participating in RhyPiBoMo. Thank you. I look forward to our party tomorrow…5pm for me. I am not looking forward to Monday as I have to have a root canal! So I leave you with my Cinquain (see I have retained something!)
Injection, pneumatic screeching
Tension, ebbing towards relief
Thanks for the post. Picture books are so much fun when they are read out loud. I liked reading Casey at the Bat. Great poem.
Thanks, Denise for this awesome post and sharing your beautiful work!
Angie, it’s great to learn new things – types of poems, terminology, etc. I’ve never heard the term “Mask” before. Learn new things everyday 😀
I love Denise’s observation that use of a refrain can be as powerful as writing in rhyme. Never underestimate a great refrain!
Oh RhyPiBoMo, thou art cruel.
Thou knowest thou doest vex me.
But I know t’would be even worse
If thou could also text me!
Hoping this was apostrophe-apologize for the near rhyme. BTW, did I catch a forced rhyme in Casey at the Bat? If so, then if guess if you are a great poet, even a RARE forced rhyme is forgiven??
“Close by the sturdy batsman the ball unheeded sped-“
Thanks Angie! I am enjoying learning about all the new types of poetry I hadn’t heard of!
I love Denise’s comment that picture books are theatre. A good thing to remember. Angie, I am learning so much.
Thank you Denise for a very encouraging post.
Angie, thanks for another informative lesson. I found it interesting that Casey at the Bat switches tenses at the end. hmm…
Thanks again for a great post with lots of great links!
Thanks for more, and I’m surprised on how much informative information you put into one day’s post. They can keep me reading for a couple of days!
Denise Fleming is such a favorite- thanks!
I really appreciate your sharing your work and letting us see that your style has been successful, I love Tall Tall grass, reading it aloud gets the ideas flowing : )
Maybe there is a list somewhere already (please tell me where if there is)
, but I would love to know who the visiting guests are in advance. That way I can go to the library and have a copy of their book(s) handy when I read their column. I also understand this may not be practical from any organizational point of view.
There is a blog calendar with the blog schedule and daily lessons listed. Go to Frequently asked Questions and you will find it there…thx for joining us!
Thanks for another great post!
Thank you Denise, and Angie.
Oh, that Casey. Every time I read it I think by golly he’s gonna do it this time! I guess I’ll leave my money on Big Papi 🙂
Denise Fleming is great. There are so many people that write beautiful poetry without ever knowing the “hows,” and it’s refreshing to hear someone so well versed (pardon the pun) admit that they don’t know everything. She’s a great inspiration. The post was a little hard to read today, but the content was wonderful. I ended up using Dramatic Voice for the writing prompt, but it was a Mask poem in Conversation form. ^_^ I’m having so much fun! Thanks for a great week, Angie
My children and I love Denise’s illustrations and simple elegant rhyme. Thanks for the post!
Wow! Another wonderful post. Thank you, Angie and Denise. My poem today;
What are you doing in my lake?
I swim, I don’t skate.
I like it!
It was so good rereading Casey at the Bat! Great illustration.
Am learning so much every day! :- )
Enjoyed the lesson today. I love Casey at the Bat. I remember seeing it as a cartoon on TV one time.
Denise and Angie, thank you for this post. I cannot believe all that I’ve learned and all that I still have to learn. What fun! Denise, your work is beautiful.
My head is starting to spin with all this info about poetic forms. But, keep it coming. I’ll just keep spinning!!
This has been a week full of learning!
I can’t wait to read Denise’s books. And she offered such great advise. Thank you for the lesson, Angie. So much to learn.
A well written rhyme or poem is a pleasure to read.
Poorly written ones… Painful!
But Breaking rhythm & using less than perfect rhymes can be used effectively.
But certainly not mindlessly.
Thank you, Denise, for sharing your experience and wonderful books.
Angie, thank you for another great day of lessons and resources. I tackled a narrative in iambic tetrameter-did some digging!
I am going to look for Denise’s books at my library. They look like great fun. Now, on to my homework.