I must alert you…there is a Poetry Notebook
Thief on the loose!
One of our RhyPiBoMo Notebooks has been stolen!
Last week I mailed one of our coveted RhyPiBoMo Notebooks to Kristen Spina Foote, a Rhyming Party winner. She sadly informed me today that she received an empty package from the USPS! Empty! Apparently, a Rhyming-Poetry Thief stole the notebook! I knew I should have insured that notebook for more money! So, be warned, if you display anything with the words RhyPiBoMo on it, there is a chance it may be stolen, so…guard it with your life! LOL
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Kristen, watch for another one coming to you soon! I’ll put it in a box this time!
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Our Next Rhyming Party will be this Sunday at 6:00 p.m. Central Time!
(That’s Chicago Time)
What is a Rhyming party? It’s a one hour rhyming fun challenge in our Facebook Group! First, you must be a registered RhyPiBoMoer, next you must only comment in rhyme during the entire hour and finally, bring your fast fingers because I ask lots of quiz-type questions about the previous week’s blog posts and the fastest one to answer gets their name thrown into a hat for a prize. As I hadn’t figured out how to fund the prizes for this year, they are very limited. I will give away another RhyPiBoMo notebook and a manuscript critique by me, this Sunday…
So be there or be square!
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I was fortunate enough to meet today’s guest blogger at a Regional SCBWI Conference last spring in Ft. Wayne, Indiana. I listened her keynote address to hundreds of eager writers, in a beautiful ball room, surrounded by other well-known, yet equally as enthralled authors. The room stood still as Jane took the podium, sharing stories of her past, demanding the absolute best from each and every one of us sitting there and uttering her famous “Butt in Chair” phrase” as the crowd smiled and clapped. She’s a rock star! Yes, I asked her to autograph several of her books for me that day. I was impressed at how genuine and down to earth she was…and how smart! I was honored to meet her!
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So, without further ado, I’m honored to present today’s
Golden Quill Guest Blogger
Jane Yolen!
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Poems are coded messages of fact and emotion. Did you know that poems were actually used in World War II as the base for the SOE, Special Ops Executive codes that the Underground used in France and elsewhere. Agents’ ciphers hinged on poems, and one of the most famous was written by Leo Marks for his fiancée who died in a plane crash. When Marks was in SOE, he gave this poem to the beautiful French agent Violette Szabo to use as her cipher before she was dropped into occupied France in 1944
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The life that I have
Is all that I have
And the life that I have
Is yours.
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The love that I have
Of the life that I have
Is yours and yours and yours.
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A sleep I shall have
A rest I shall have
Yet death will be but a pause.
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For the peace of my years
In the long green grass
Will be yours and your and yours.
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Poets are code masters, and especially when we write poems for children. Our poems—whether funny or serious, short or long, nonsense or full of sense—change the course of a child’s growing as thoroughly as the Leonard Markses of World War II changed the course of history.
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But just as Marks’ poem is rhymed on the slant (yours and pause and years are not perfect rhymes but remind the reader that I have resonance, kissing cousins as it were.
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I sometimes worry that we children’s book poets forget that the family of poetry is very wide. Not just the immediate mother/father/sister/brother, those perfectly rhymed and scanned lines. Sometimes we need to break away from the jingle and go into the jungle of terrifying poetry.
Do you know J. Patrick Lewis’ poem that begins:
From Pat Lewis
The Rules of History
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The fatter the king, the thinner the serf.
The longer the reign, the duller the pain.
The stronger the crown, the weaker the law.
The fainter the dream, the slimmer the hope.
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And after two more wonderful, heart-pounding, forced-march verses ends this way:
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The weaker the foe, the shriller the cry.
The louder the lie, the further the truth.
The madder the war, the sadder the foes.
The wiser the peace, the wider the peace.
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Now there are no end rhymes in it, but some internal rhyming both true rhymes, like madder/sadder and slant rhyme reminders wiser/wider of what he is writing about.
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But if he’d written this in jingle form—and he’s very good at rhymed poems as well—he might have come up with something like this:
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The weaker the foe, the shriller the cry.
The further the truth, the louder the lie
The madder the war, the sadder the foes.
For that is the way the world often goes.
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But look what we have lost in this poem: the pounding footsteps of the advancing army, the last line bashing in your head with a homily. This way, the verse could be put on Burma Shave signs, those placards of one line after another of a jingle that was the invention of a shaving cream ad campaign. But the way Lewis writes it, it will be put in the child reader’s heart.
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I’m not saying do away with rhyme. I am saying make the rhyme fit what the poem is about. Be clever, be deep, be sensual with your word choices. Don’t let the rhyme dictate the poem but the poem dictate the word and line choices.
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Be coded message, not an ad campaign.
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–Jane Yolen, author of Emily Sonnets
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Bio:
Jane Yolen, often called “the Hans Christian Andersen of America,” admits to actually being the Hans Jewish Andersen of America. She is the author of 350 books, ranging from picture books and baby board books, through middle grade fiction, poetry collections, nonfiction, novels, graphic novels, and story collections . Her books and stories have won many awards, including two Nebulas, a World Fantasy Award, a Caldecott, the Golden Kite, three Mythopoeic awards, two Christopher Medals, nomination for the National Book Award, and Jewish Book Award. She has two collections of adult poetry and a gadzillion books of children’s poetry. She also won the Kerlan Award and the Catholic Library’s Regina Medal. Six colleges and universities have given her honorary doctorates.
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Thank you Jane Yolen!
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RhyPiBoMo Daily Lesson: Saturday, April 12th
By Angie Karcher © 2014
Lesson 14
Consider this a bit of Saturday review…
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Perhaps we should start by asking how many syllables are in the word poem?
I pronounce it “Po-em” with 2 syllables but some people pronounce it “Poem” with one syllable. The official word based on 3 syllable dictionaries is that poem has 2 syllables. This brings us to such an important lesson about how critical it is to know your words. Choose them wisely and maybe even leave out words that could be controversial in the pronunciation.
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A Syllable – is a unit of organization for a sequence of speech sounds and is an uninterrupted segment of speech. A syllable is the smallest conceivable expression of sound.(write this down)
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For example:
Dog has 1 syllable
Kit-ten has 2 syllables
Syl-la-ble has 3 syllables
A-vi-a-tion has 4 syllables
Dis-a-gree-a-ble has 5 syllables
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A syllable is a unit of pronunciation uttered without interruption, loosely, a single sound. All words are made from at least one syllable. (write this down)
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Vowels – A-E-I-O-U and sometimes Y
Consonants – B-C-D-F- G- H- J- K- L- M- N- P- Q- R- S- T- V- X- Z -W-Y:
Note that the combination of consonants can create a singular sound as well
For example:
TH – SH- CH – GR – DR
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Monosyllables have only one vowel sound (write this down)
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Polysyllables have more than one. (write this down)
If a syllable ends with a consonant, it is called a closed syllable.
If a syllable ends with a vowel, it is called an open syllable.
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Thanks to Mandy Yates, a Reading Specialist, for a better explanation of the different types of syllables!
Here are the 6 different types of syllables:(write this down)
1) Closed– CVC or just VC (cat or if) a consonant closes the vowel sound making it a short vowel)
2) Open– CV or just V (there is no consonant closing it off so it’s a long vowel sound and there is just one vowel= to, go, no or just I or a.)
3) Vce- words with the silent e= like, bake, cake, note
4) R-Controlled or Vowel R– words with ar/ur/or/er/ir- these appear to be closed, but in order to be closed the vowel would be short. These make a whole new sound.
5) Vowel Teams or Vowel Pairs– two vowels side by side. Can create a long sound = ai/ea/ay sometimes a short sound like /ea/ in bread or a whole new sound= ou/ow/oi
6) Final Stable Syllables– these are non-phonetic patterns (meaning you can’t sound them out) that go on the end of a word: tion/tian/cian/ etc…or all of the consonant le patterns (ble/tle/ple.)
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There is a tendency in English when a word with a
stressed final syllable is followed by another word without a pause,
the stress moves forward: “kangaROO”, but “KANGaroo court”;
“afterNOON”, but “AFTernoon nap”; “above BOARD”, but “an aBOVEboard
deal”.
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An interesting link to several maps showing regional difference in specific words:
http://www.thejournal.ie/maps-americans-pronounce-different-words-938575-Jun2013/
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Why must we have a concrete understanding of syllables?
The best way to improve your rhythm and meter is to get used to counting syllables. This is obviously not the only factor nor should it be your main focus, just the place to begin. This should become second nature to you.
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I was a dedicated syllable counter before researching the daily lessons here but now I have a whole bag of tricks to use when writing poetry…not just counting syllables! That said, it is still important that your lines stay consistent in syllable count. I think there is a tiny bit of wiggle room in rhyming picture books but not much…just an extra syllable here or there…This should be the very limited exception to the rule!
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Review:
The best poems to practice this with would be with Haiku, Tanka and Cinquain. We discussed Haiku and Cinquain the first week so this will be good practice.
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Haiku – 3 line poem
line one has five syllables
line two has seven syllables
line three has five syllables
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For example:
Sparrows circle high (5 syllables)
Sunny rays stream through gray skies (7 syllables)
Water drips from leaves (5 syllables)
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Tanka – 5 line poem
line one has five syllables
line two has seven syllables
line three has five syllables
line four has seven syllables
line five has seven syllables
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For example:
Snow drifts by my glass (5 syllables)
Spiders of ice form a branch (7 syllables)
Dancing on a breeze (5 syllables)
Small white dots move back and forth (7 syllables)
Sway to Mother Nature’s call (7 syllables)
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Cinquain – 5 line poem
line one has two syllables
line two has four syllables
line three has six syllables
line four has eight syllables
line five has two syllables
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For example:
Puppies (2 syllables)
Ornery fun (4 syllables)
Playing, barking, sleeping (6 syllables)
Favorite little loving friends (8 syllables)
Playful (2 syllables)
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Look what I found…a few syllable dictionaries! These could certainly help with those words that are pronounced differently in different regions.
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Syllable Dictionary
http://howmanysyllables.com/words/calculator
Syllable and Word Count Calculator
http://www.wordcalc.com/
Syllable Counter
http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_resources/syllable_counter.aspx
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Resource: REALLY GOOD INFORMATION!
Poetry Terms and Forms
http://www.famousliteraryworks.com/poetry-terms.htm
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As Jane Yolen is our guest blogger, I had to share something
I found on her website that will be very helpful.
Five Tips On Writing A Poem
By Jane Yolen
1. Look at the world through metaphor,
seeing one tree in terms of another.
2. Let two words bump up against another
Or seesaw on a single line.
3. Tell the truth inside out
Or on the slant.
4. Remember that grammar can be a good friend
And a mean neighbor.
5. Let the poem rhyme in the heart,
Though not always on the page.
http://janeyolen.com/poetry/
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Writing Prompt: Write a Tanka today, as this is not one we have tried yet.
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Loved Jane Yolen’s comments about rhyme on a slant!! Something to think about….
Jane’s comment, “Be sensual with your word choice” is so beautiful and true to the heartbeat of poetry!
Tanka writing- what a fun way to review the importance of syllable count in a meaningful poem that rings true. Thanks for today’s lesson, Angie!
“Don’t let the rhyme dictate the poem but the poem dictate the word and line choices.” Thank you, Jane. I needed this reminder– it’s easy to sacrifice the poem’s soul in our quest for solving the rhyme puzzle.
Another great post:
The rain comes down hard
The corrugated roof drums
Like a band on stage
Pitter patter pitter pat
The creek fill up to the brim!
It doesn’t get any better than Jane Yolen!
Great lesson! So interesting that a word with a final stressed syllable can change depending on what comes after it. Another thing to watch out for!
Here goes a try at writing a quick Tanka:
Writing a Tanka,
choosing words so carefully.
And how will I do?
Counting syllables so well,
I will do just fine!
Any advice Jane Yolen gives, is certainly worth its’ weight in Gold! 🙂
I love Jane Yolen’s writing
Thank you, Jane Yolen and Angie, for so much inspiration.
I love Jane Yolen’s “How Do Dinosaurs Say Goodnight?”. Today’s lesson – all new to me. I had no idea there were names for different types of syllables.
Always great advice from Jane Yolen!
Jane Yolen had great advice to share. There sure are a lot of ‘poetic terms.’ Sure glad we’re not having a quiz…right?
How can you not love Jane Yolen? Thanks for getting so many great guest bloggers to inspire us all month long!
Its so great to hear from guest bloggers to learn from and be inspired by! Thanks Angie!
Isn’t a Tanka
A sturdy, metal toy truck?
A broken axle!
Rusted love, it longs for mud
and hands that hate cleanliness.
I love Jane Yolen! Thank you for the great post.
The example from J. Patrick Lewis’ poem really drove home Jane’s advice.
Thanks for the prompt! My Tanka decided that it didn’t want to be for children, but the end result was still very satisfying.
More great info, Angie. Jane writes fabulous books. Time to write a Tanka!
great info!
Wonderful Jane! Having studied How Does a Dinosaur Say Good Night, I’ve noticed the lines aren’t cookie cutter perfect but they sound perfect. Thank you for reminding us how its done.
I am going to have to gnaw on the different types of syllables a little more. I found that part a little complex, so I am going to spend some time ruminating over those some more so I can get a better grasp of them. I, myself, am a syllable counter. But, I am pretty good at determining stresses too. Thanks!
Tanka, tanka, tanka… mmmm…. I go for it. Thanks for the post!!!
One of my favorite days so far. So many nuggets of wisdom from a master! Jane Yolen’s advice here reminds me of the old adage to learn the rules, so you can learn when and how it’s best to break them.
I’m loving all these insights on writing poetry and rhyming picture books. Thank you, Jane and Angie.
I think I’m a “jingler.” Jane’s daily poems are inspiring me, but the finesse escapes my own pen.
I plan to post Jane’s 10 words every picture book writer must know above my desk. Thank you, Jane and Angie!